All Comments on 'It Runs in the Family'

Well done!

Nice

Disjointed and boring. Almost want even worth the time to skip forward to award 1 start and post my tribute to my newest discovery of a nonwriter.

A slow build up for a lackluster ending.

It was a bit all over the place, really. Some of your adjectives were quite strange, too, e.g. his arm felt 'poignant'? Just seemed like your were struggling to vary your adjectives to not be repetitive, but missed a few times. Not bad, though, as a 69th story

This seems almost like a clinical narrative trying to be erotica. The fact that Lizzy isn't connecting any emotional feelings for Ben to the intimacy of sex really disappointed me. It was well written but not at all interesting to me. In all honesty, I really had to struggle through reading this story all the way to the ending. I lost interest and set it aside twice before finally finishing it. 2/5