by wantsomefun1951
That was written fantastically. Sad story, but fantastic. There was little to no errors; it was easy to read and fun to read. It's nice to get a well written free story on this site. There's not a whole lot of good ones.
I don't have a problem with hetero sex so those quick references were no problem. After all, I think we all got our fair share of it in highschool. There's not a whole lot of homosexual literature out there to begin with, let alone literary classics.
As much as I love to have an ending; I've come to appreciate the ambiguity. Keep writing!
quite the sick n twisted tale...great. there cud've been a few more sentences to give a better sense of completion at the end..
Better be more chapters cause the cliffhanger ending sucked though I think this fits INCEST more or even Horror
Wow! Great story. I just hope you aren't leaving us to decide if he'd kill him. I haven't read your other work but I'd definitely want to. I think you found something here though, as you are pretty damn good at writing a dark story. I liked the flow and the way you worked the past into the present. It is well-written and really kept my attention. I think you should definitely try to write another dark piece soon.
Absolutly loved it.....and the ending left to the reader imagination was absolutly fantastic.
dark and sad and lovely. i didn't get 'cliffhanger' from this at all, think it's pretty obvious he shot his brother.
My "friend" who commented here, and on a bunch of my other stuff, on October 15, 2012, is apparently not a fan.
It wouldn't surprise me if I knew who he was -- another writer who is nice enough to me when we're both logged-in on the other website where we submit stories, but who stabs his fellow writers in the back when he can. He's one of those guys who takes himself WAY too seriously.
Buddy -- we're writing porn and submitting it without payment to an internet site, using FAKE names. This is a hobby, a way to have fun, to express ourselves, and to entertain, isn't it?
Thanks for the "1" rating. I wish you had actually read the damn thing.
I think a lot of effort and, yes, talent went into writing this story. As far as I'm concerned, your friend is full of it if he wants to trash you over writing this. It was tense, hot and very thought provoking right to the very end.
I'm with baikalisan...DAMN Indeed!!! Keep up the AMAZINGLY AWESOME writing!!! And Don't be listening to Haters!!! Haters are gonna Hate for MANY reasons but I Have to write this one...because They Aren't nor Can they Ever Be as TALENTED AS YOU!!! DAMN!!! This Was EPIC!!! THANK YOU!!!