All Comments on 'Jack and Stella Pt. 01'

Wish I had a first date like this!!

Due to such a story, I get totally hooked on the theme of F/d. Great Plot, thank you, please more!

Well written apart from the constant use of 'begins'. Your not the only one who does it but it gets really, really annoying.

In response to the 'anonymous user' who titled their comment: "Stop saying 'begins'!", you are completely right! I didn't even notice how often the word was used until you pointed it out. I can't edit my story on here, but I have reduced its use by >50% in the original document and will be updating my Amazon publication accordingly.

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Well done! Do you have her phone number/

Good beginning. But the fucking happened too fast. There could have been much more teasing before insertion. And what about her breasts? Nothing? Why not? The sight of them? The feel of them? The taste of them? Having them wrapped around his cock for a while?