All Comments on 'Jack's Daily Grind'

I've been waiting for this and was not disappointed. Well done.

Good story, enjoyed it alot.

Although the sex was great, the level of love and caring was refreshing. The fact of fatherhood being precious was also a delight. This was a wonderful story and even with an eye strain headache I could not stop reading it. Thanks for taking the time to share this.

What an excellent, fun story. I enjoyed reading it. Well done.

So sorry to be anon, but I forgot my password. I have been enjoying Jack's tale, and I hope that you will continue to keep his heroic adventures forthcoming.

These are those rare gems that keep me reading such awesome novels like this! Great work!!

I'm not a lover of these kind of SiFi stories but I'm really enjoying these. I hope you post again soon and many more... Thanks

Great story! And although the sex part was good no substitute for a good script.

Please continue!

So good I couldn't stop reading it! Thank you for writing this wonderful story.

you are one of the best writers on this site . PLEASE keep up the good work.

Enjoyed the story. Just keep gettin better ... Jack has a exciting life. Nothin boring here. Can't wait for next chapters...

Terrific plot, outstanding characters, what's not to like?

please.

Another page turner...thanks for a great story with a difference!!!

You are a fine writer!

I read this series in order and it is FANTASTIC 5 stars for each chapter .

I think SplitAces put it in better words than i can think of to say .

Thanks for the great read keep it up .

tx cracker

i hve xenophilia myself; so wouldnt it be great to live jack's like?

- loved the self absorbed flake and the dense skulls parts, they were really entertaining

- just a suggestion for the next installment, a new humanoid species that s rough and hard in comprison to the soft and delicate altarians

BR, I have to compliment you for your most excellent imagineering of SF adventuring with smartly developed characters and their interstellar romping with cleverly described xeno-delicious eroticism.

good writing! more to come i hope :)

Well written and I enjoyed from beginning to end. Good Job.

Absolutely freaking spectacular......... I wish I could write full length stories like this

I hope we find out why the robed guy was so testy with Jack. He said it was uncharacteristic of his species so there may be something there.

But the biggest mystery is how and when will jack have Gee and Bal in his bed.

Damn. Just damn. You even work in respect into the whole system wich is just truly amazing. Well crafted

Great read

Please keep it up

I ABSOLUTELY crack up every time I read those two words.

Describing the Altarians' reflex reaction to surprise or distress as 'bleating', or a 'bleat', is pure genius, and also endearingly hilarious. "She bleated..." LOL

I discovered your impressive talent with 'Bacchus'. My initial appraisal was confirmed with 'The Shepard...'. Now, after completing the adventures of Jack, I am in awe.

You are a literary talent who should be published, (if you aren't already, under a different name); and writing novels and/or screenplays for the consumption and enjoyment of millions.

You have an insight into human emotions and frailty AND the ability to bring it out in your characters rarely seen in modern literature.

To also be able to create rich worlds, interesting inhabitants of those worlds and engaging storylines to display those emotions and frailties is beyond any words of admiration I could write.

Thank you SO much for all of the time and hard work it takes to put your insights into 'the human condition' in such enjoyable portions.

Kudos, and thanks, again.

GeoD

"She bleated..." ROFLMAO!

PS:

Oh, good, now I get to read about Bishop's angel, the taboo Duo, and Ben's adventures in France...

G

You are not only gifted with remarkable insight into both interpersonal & intrapersonal emotions but also able to convey those insights in such a way that your readers can feel them as well. As far as I'm concerned, I LOVE the way you submit entire chapters of such length as to allow me to immerse myself in the story without the short one or two page teasers that far too many writers resort to on this site. Please continue this practice; no story is too long if it's well written as yours always are.

Gratefully,

nthusiastic

LMAO. Or maybe ROFL.Ah, what the heck, make it ROFLCOPTER.

will you continue jack's story?

A shepherd in space. Literally.

the adventures expand with each addition.

thanks for the delightful story

Every time I read the author's screen name, BurntRedstone, my mind flashes back to when I lived in New Mexico. Thanks for triggering pleasant memories.

This story was so good every work of yours I read gets better and better please do continue with this

Story was great, but it is getting a little bogged down and complicated with all the pregnancies. Personally I do not see the attraction. I have a little girl. But one is enough!

If you have to ask, I can't tell you here. (It would take too long, be better with interaction, and has several possible layers ranging from the inane and chauvinistic to the deep, profound, and heart warming.)

Their governments concern me. BLEH!! *shudder*

I so totally think that there should be a reciprocity clause to the challenge. If they loose they get banished. Alongside having to also abstain from sex, if possible. As it is, there is a huge gaping hole in their legal system for males to banish other males, especially the queen's consort, with little effort if done in a group. What about re-challenges or other males, admittedly Jack has his own loophole now, but a government needs to look to the future. :-( Not to mention this means they could force the queen and the other females to abstain from relations with him for such time. Again, he'll beat them but what about forfeiting faster? I don't have warm fuzzies about SennLann's home world either. :-/

I say 'away with archaic laws.' Laws should have a regular expiration date. If it's important enough to keep then it's important enough to pass again. :-D

Intriguing story. Really got me involved in it.

As I´m reading your tales in order of submission, I can tell that you´re to draft up some pretty good outlines to work off of...nicely done...I´ll go see what else you´ve submitted...Thanks again BR, keep ém coming...

I'm sorry, but this is the part of the story that lost me. I was really into it until somehow this peaceful, intelligent race somehow has a law that allows 245 people to challenge somebody to physical combat and keep them from having sex? How the he'll does this make any sense within the society described in the other chapters? And how is there no penalty for a failed challenge? They went from a peaceful society to illogical barbarism in a heartbeat. I get that there has to be some sort of conflict to keep a story going, but it should be internally consistent conflict.

Hey, Elissa just delivered a kid, she's having sex with Jack, he is twiddling her nips...lactation anyone? Six dripping nozzles and I'm the first one to comment on the oversight?! And how come no multiple births? Re: six nipples!

This series is just too damned cute for words. Thank you so much for sharing!

JP

you said something about 6 nipples and multiple births. think of cows and of deer. they have multiple nipples, yet seldomn do they have twins or more... I know a lot of woman that have 2 nipples and none of them have had twins or more...

Sorry, good story and it is in fantasy and sci-fi. I find myself chuckling at the story and laughing out loud at some of the comments. Very entertaining.

Thank you

We find new worlds in your imagination and always enjoy the trip.

Thank you.

This story is brilliant. The premise, the characters, the execution all sooooo good. There’s sex, action, comedy, intrigue, and suspense. If you were to remove the sex the story would still be compelling. And most importantly, I care about the characters. Love it! 5-stars. (Can you tell I like it?)

Extraterrestrial girls are easy.

Apparently.

Well, for BurntRedStone protagonists at least, who all happen to be avatars of sensitive masculinity.

Still a delight to read!

...I would enjoy this arc, but I do. I think if it were "human" females it would make me uneasy.

Lots of intrigue, plotting and humor along the way. Quite intricate.

I just finished the third in this series and have to say I'm thoroughly enjoying it. I like the Ashburn Court series a little better but this has me really entertained.

Great series of stories. Would!d love to read more like this.

Definitely a very pro-creative story! Very well written and so much fun to read! Thank you!

Iirc cats can have litters with multiple sperm donors, THAT would be a hoot.

Guess I'll read on to find out

Do you realize Jack, has cuckolded an entire civilization. Good read.

Both Jack and I couldn't stop, him from fathering children, me from reading this amazing story. Such a tangled web that is so entertaining and enjoyable to read. What more can I say, except it should get way more than five stars.

Big fun. So many times I've laughed my way through your stories. Thanks for posting. Always 5 stars.

This was the easiest five star I think I've ever given!! I laughed in bed loud enough in the middle of the night to wake my wife up, twice!

Gotta say though, he does seem to be kind of a quick shot more often than not, lol, you'd think that having sex EVERY day, FIVE times a day, he would be able to pay his girls through for or five orgasms first by now! Hell, after the second or third time for the day I probably wouldn't be able to finish at all and would just have to enjoy the experience and give up from exhaustion. :/

I think I'd move my white fired lover in with me, not keeping her close would seem kinda cruel since you're her only make, as close to a relationship as possible for them! Though now he's going to have a line of white fired angels flurrying around him permanently, once word gets out!! Woo! Add the human girl and minx lover and it's a whirlwind of fun! He needs a bigger bed!!

I kept thinking he needed to get on network tv and tell everyone that the men's club was basically slapping the queen in the face by telling her she didn't have the right to pick her lover or the father of her child, worse, telling her that they thought that her child was basically a bastard! So to support the queen, there should be a Nationwide ban on having sex with any of the 245 members until the challenge was over, and in keeping with that, all females should stop supporting those males financially or with living space until the original 245 days are up!

AND counter challenge all of them, starting that they don't have the ability to satisfy females well enough or have high enough quality genes to produce the best offspring! Hehe. I'll start my scheduling of duels right after my current 245 duels are done, of course the challenge is in effect, so no sex for you guys starting now! Oh, since I, a male, actually have a job and I'm so busy, I'll only be doing duels on the weekends, one each day, so it shouldn't take but about two years and nine months to get through them all! You guys can abstain for three years, right??

Really enjoyed this episode! Part way through I got the idea that this is the story Isaac Asimov would have written if he got an erection when he started his 216th novel, and decided to turn it into s Sci-Fi Inter-Species Sex Romp! Thanx for another Great Read!

“She’s carrying my child.” “Our child”, a weak voice said! And that summarizes this whole segment. Five stars.

I laughed so hard I woke up my dog from across the house. Twice.

This series keeps getting better!

I don't normally read Sci-Fi stories, especially here, because they usually go off the deep end talking about other worlds, other species, impossible scenarios.

This series is the opposite, putting a man into a different world, and making that world seem normal.

Great read! 5/5

Excellent read! Looking forward to more! Thank-you

I love the sense of humour running througth this series.

I hope the next Jack Danner story has a romantic scene for Diana & SennLann. I love their pairing and think they're good for each other

I’m not sure I will read any more the 245 day challenge bullshit is just stupid. I haven’t read past the opening lines to know if he gets around it or not. That is how stupid I believe it is.

When I found myself questioning the probability of him getting shot in the horns twice I realized that I never once questioned the relationships. That is the mark of good sci-fi, when the interactions are believable within the constructs of the author's conceit. Nothing to throw me out of the fantasy. Also, thank you for writing a fun adventure with a main character in his 30s? without all the dark tragedy and emotional torment that seem to come with any story like that in recent years.

Loving the story!

"What? It could happen!" - Not with BurntRedstone as the author!

The one part of the story that jarred a bit was the abstinence clause. Such a clause seriously disadvantages the challenged consort so that it is not a fair challenge, and the better the consort is the bigger the disadvantage, because they would be withdrawing from more frequent sex. At the least the challenger(s) should also have to be abstinent, even though this would not affect a challenger who was so hopeless as to be involuntarily abstinent anyway.

The very fact of the challenge law existing is only acceptable by way of poetic licence, as it is at odds with the fact that male pheromones signal their suitability, but even so such a challenge should still be either fair, or any bias be based on other factors, such as social status, rather than simply against the consort.

Still, it made for a very entertaining story, so thumbs up and five stars. 👍

There’s an entire part of the story missing and can you label the freaking stories so that we know in which order to read them because this is beyond freaking frustrating!

I found fantasy, sci-fi, silliness, humor, weird sex, unreal randiness, unbelievable macho-sex staying power, and more.

Contrast that with a presumably nursing mother who can enjoy nipple play without making a mess, uncontrollable sexual urges due to cross-genetic pheromones (and the highly selective lack of medical expertise to provide relief), a multi-planet Queen who has time to diddle and socialize.

Now add in selective technology (a scooter that blows up? a conventional handgun?), interplanetary political intrigue, and a bit of murder.

Wow, Burnt, you packed a LOT into a well woven plot and great writing. Thank you!

Keep 'em comin'.

An Amazing story by an Amazing Author! Thank you! I always shied away from this genre but I guess it depends on the Author as this is my third Non-human by this Author and all three have been excellent stories! Thank you Burnt Red Stone. 5 BIG FAT BLAZING NOVA STARS!

Another awesome part. The abstinence and first implied banishment sheet he broke it was a bit of a "no deal" for me. Didn't want to see it all break up. You wrote a good way to recover the story and I'm very happy with the ending so far.

The story have me great joy and I'll look into the next part. Thank you very much for sharing this story!

Great story, well told as usual.

Just smiling ...... This is definitely out of space and a fabulous great entertainment

🚀🚀🚀🚀🚀🚀🚀🚀🚀🚀🍀

YEAH! Good stuff, ... keep 'em coming, ... ;-) TTFN

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Great series, full marks. I'm sure Jacks going to die with a smile on his face.

5 stars ! You have a very good imagination!

"... "Regardless, I have to get back to Altaria. I'm a 'daddy'... again. See, here it's appropriate to use that term. They're babies."

Diana squirmed. "On Earth it's a term of endearment and has no age restrictions," she pouted.

Jack went still and looked at the woman. "You know I'm from Earth, right?"

Her pout just got deeper. ..."

He may be from earth, but he's clearly not spent much time in the southern United States. In the South, "daddy" and "granddaddy" are used as terms denoting filial respect and affection. Some of the hardest men I ever knew, good and bad, called their fathers "daddy". And God help anyone who made the mistake of mocking them for it. I don't know where Diana is from, but if it's the South, that's why she does that. Or at least it's a perfectly reasonable explanation for it, no immaturity or "daddy issues" required. Trust me. When your 1st Sergeant tells a story about his father, and calls him "daddy" you change your perspective on the term real quick.

Rereading this for maybe the fourth time (though in my defense the last time was a good while ago) and this stuck out at me again. 1: why would the Altarians allow a modification to the dueling rules that would turn a duel into a binary "lose or die" situation? Because clearly no male could survive going that long without sex. Therefore that "rule" turns the duel into an automatic win for the Challenger! Either the challenged will die, from successfully abstaining that long, or he'll fail. There's no third option, barring the intervention of a non Altarian female. On top of that, no dueling system I've ever heard of puts that much power into the hands of the challenger. It's always the challenged person who sets the rules for the duel, or chooses the weapons. It seems bizarre to me that the Altarians, being so much more advanced, would have such a dismal and unbalances system for deciding challenges. Of course they're also peaceful, so they have less experience, but I would expect that would make them all the more cautious in establishing the rules for such an event/procedure.

2: why would Lunnae bother bringing a gun? He was there to accept/be informed that Jack had forfeited! The only thing I can think of that would explain it is if he somehow didn't know about the forfeit, despite everyone else in the crowd apparently knowing, and he thought he'd have to fight Jack himself. Idk.

Love this series, those two(ish) things just always bothered me about this entry in the series.

Reread the section. Lunnae has a smug expression, and expected to win. So why did he bring the gun? Did he expect Jack to attack him? If so, why was he so calm? *Baffled*

I wasn't enamored with the story concept of sex with sentient sheep -or goats. But this story was absolutely hilarious. So much fun! Thanks BR.

Good, better, best. ... loving it! Thanks, again.

Best damn Author at Literotica. Can't get enough of BurntRedStones stories! Another 5 BIG ASS FUCKING HUGE FLAMING NOVA STARS! Thanks again BRS! Your the BEST!

Man is that challenge fucking stupid, absolutly nothing about it makes sense. So i cant tske it seriously at all. Next time try to actually put in effort in making it in any way believable

Back for another round! Can't get enough of BRS's stories. Another 5 BIG ASS FUCKING HUGE FLAMING NOVA STARS! Thanks again BRS!

Due to the comment below, I'd bet the words were just too complicated for the commentors understanding and so, left a very nasty comment. Probably never completed more than middle School and was picked on by other students.

Super Human with the prong of steel !

This is fun! It’s also imaginative.

The complained about the challenge being stupid and unrealistic is completely unwarranted. FIRST this is an ALIEN society. That means that these beings developed from the primordial ooze completely differently with different values and ideals. They are essentially a grass eating herbivore herding species. So yeah if a female goes into heat then she gets the guy. That’s from an earlier story, the first one. Then on top of that a challenge is an ancient thing remember not a modern thing, so it’s really old school old world thinking. (Humans had some strange violent customs about honour and women in the old days, even just a few hundred years ago. Dueling with pistols and swords to the death or first very bad injury. That was over women and honour.)

So this challenge is literally a dual till the opponent is done or forfeits. So why can’t more than one person challenge someone to a duel over the same thing or woman? Fighting over women with violence is a thing to this very day! The abstenince is a VERY BELIEVABLE thing. This challenge was about mating rights and being attached to a female! An important female. So since his right to mate and be consort with the Queen was challenged to 245 duels of course he can’t fuck her! But the wording just says abstinence so that’s that. Without that then the perceived damage that he’s causing, hence the duel, would continue until the duels are done. So it’s fighting over a girl and no one gets the girl at all till the fight is sorted! Sounds reasonable.

Now the duel is reasonable. And the abstinence is reasonable. AND since the males are poncy useless wankers with a second class education and an inflated self value, and this is reasonable as the breeding of their race is dependent on just 9% of the population. That is precarious as just killing that 9% causes extinction. So then this self inflated wanker with a bruised ego CO-OPTED AN ACIENT LAW AND TWISTED IT FOR HIS OWN ENDS. USA citizens do that all the time seeing everyone over nothing because their feelings were hurt, so they co-opt a law that’s actually meant for more important things.

So write the stories they rock. Sorting them out by their date published is a pain though. Joe was brilliant and so detailed and complex. Does he live almost eternally? He is half of a very long lived Faraha. Please write more.

These are alien worlds so have alien ideas and perspectives. Otherwise it’s just an earth story with different looking people set in a strange place. MAKE THEM FUN I love the stories.

... settle down, enjoy his big family, .... What? It could happen, .... yeah, right Jack, .... but not if this author has his way, ... ;-) ttfn

It bears more than a resemblance to the USA first ambassador to France. Ben Franklin was a horny old goat in Paris, and eventually had 73 grandchildren.