All Comments on 'Jack's Wage Slavery Pt. 01'

Amazing story! Please keep the chapters coming!

I've finished the recent "Shepard" chapter an hour ago and found the new "Jack" one and went straight to it.

Please please post the next chapters soon.

Definetly love this new installment of jack's story. Keep 'em coming!

Great story. Love the plot and characters. The stories you write and very well done. Keep up the excellent work.

Again you impress me with your writing prowess. This was a wonderful addition to Jack's story. I really enjoyed the fact that you changed the point of view to give us a deeper insight into some of the other characters. I hope you continue with this style in the future. While it is always great to read from Jack's perspective it would be a nice change of pace to see events through the eyes of his ladies and/or enemies. Keep up the lovely work.

Really enjoyed reading this whole series, love SF stuff with the added bonus of the hot interludes. This latest story is really plot driven so I'm keen to see where it goes next. Keep up the great work and I look forward to the next instalment.

BurntRedstone, you are just so damn evil! This stories plot is great, the characters are great and continue a great feel of the romanticism that is shared with the other story portions. Your cliffhanger is just so evil though! Altaria and Earth potentially going to war, Altaria and the Allsa Komanae definitely going to war. Jack's life hanging in the balance, can they get to him in time, is it worth the risk? A wonderful story that was written quite well. I look forward to reading part 2!

Holy smokes, this series has really taken off in a pretty amazing way. I enjoyed the Altarian and other females' relations with Jack, but the intrigue and action you've set up seems to have outstripped even the previous good stuff from your other Shepherd series. I would make a small criticism, that during the chase scene, which I admittedly read very quickly, it was quite confusing since it seemed truck, carrier, transport, or vehicle was used interchangeably for different ones, and I wasn't sure which one was which. Looking forward to more in any of the series!

Great so far. I'm worried about how long it will be before Pt. 02 is posted, since we were left hanging.

drop the next part left us hanging

Come on man you must satisfy our cravings

wow so much excitement!!

Well done.

Kernels of teasers, drama, and a touch of romance.

about as good as any in this genre.

Hey BR, definitely a 5 star!!! Now I´m going back to read Pt 02...when you can get the juices in this old Jarhead racing, well, that´s saying something. Thanks again...

This story is brilliant. The premise, the characters, the execution all sooooo good. There’s action, intrigue, and suspense. Nice build up in part one.

An exciting story, very well written. You continue to surprise me; just when I figure out where you're headed, you take off on a tangent. Big fun! Thanks for posting.

Damn this is good!

This went from a light-hearted and punny sex romp to a harem story to a... hell I dunno, Epic Space Opera / Sci-fi Adventure?

Great stuff!

J

..you made me want to ARGGGGGGGHHHHHH!!!!!!

This abduction! What intricate planning and what detail about how skilled Bal and Gee are too. Damn...now I have to read the rest to see if Jack gets rescued? This got deep fast!

the previous 3 installations were a good read, but the action in this one really kicks it up a notch!

Greatly enjoying your writing, as always.

Little gems like the following are always a pleasure!

"... A delivery wagon was parked across the lot and the driver was eating a lunch that was putting up a fight...."

I love this series! You are an amazing writer!

Loved it!!! Bad to the bone bitch!!!!

I continue to enjoy the Jack Saga, and appreciated the strengths and abilities you have given to Jack's guards, Gee and Bal, and the prominent and capable roles you have given to so many women in this story. I look forward to Part 2 (and beyond) and Thanx for the great Read!

If it wasn’t for the fact that he’s dead, I would suspect that BurntRedstone was a pseudonym for Keith Laumer, who wrote the Retief sci-fi stories, beginning in the early 1960s and continuing almost until his death in ‘93. The sex was at most only hinted at, given the era (sex wasn’t actually invented until the ‘60s, just as the world was black and white until the popularization of color television).

Great fun. I hope that Jack will have many more adventures in tales yet to come.

I am enjoying the Jack Series. I am not usually a Sci-Fi fan but I can easily cope with it in this series.

Keep up the good work.

I should be sleeping, but instead I'm reading this series.

Absolute thrill reading this series. My only negative is that you say at the beginning of each chapter that you will not go into detail to catch people up and then you go into extreme detail to catch everyone up...lol

A flat-out riveting story!

On to part 2!

Really don’t like your jack. He seems way too stupid to be making major trade deals. Very very dumb. He don’t seem to understand his situation ever.

This is where jack should be dead. Maybe continue the story with better characters. He hardly seems worthy of so much writing effort. He we go into spy novel crap.

Loving it.

BurntRedstome clearly understands that a great literotica story is about a lot more than just great sex scenes.

Interesting twist, but honestly nothing I expected. But to be honest I can totally imagine humans so what they did in your story.

As evil as we humans play this blue planet, as evil your described human race is a perfect mirroring ....... Shame on us ....... I hate violence or war or fighting or name it, but its our nature and we don't learn even in bits or bites sizes

I am really enjoying my (3rd or 4th?) reread of this installment, I am finding it to be still wonderful, ... and I am loving all the characters as well as the universe BurntRedstone is developing here, ... I really hope the next, new, Jack Danner story will be coming along fairly soon, I can scarcely wait, .... ;-) TTFN

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I don't know where the author hails from buuut...as a 30 year resident of Las Vegas, I really enjoyed this chapter - but as a point, prostitution is ONLY legal in Nye county NOT in Clark County.

Wonderfully done. It does well to spell out differences in cultures other than Earth's. The whole series is a fantastic story and would do well in novel form. To heck with a rating system. Simple place on the cover not suitable for children.

I was on page 6 when I said I think I'm in love with Ray. And now he's dead? Soo sad

What can I say. This series is now part of my personal HOF of Literotica stories I've read. It's also one of my new favorites in the sci-fi/non-human genre, including popular printed novels. 5/5* Fav

Fantastic storey. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Great start! Great action! Suspense, intrigue, well written - thank you!

To funding tedious.

Part one was pretty darn awesome, .... We do need Jack back, ... Gee and Bal are awesome too, ... ;-) ttfn

Wow, such a great story so far.

What Drama, what Pathos. Is this what it looks like when it hits the fan?