All Comments on 'Jackson'

Good read.

That was an excellent story. I loved the way you were able to bring in Ali from another story and integrate it into your story. 5stars

Silly girl makes good

Great story, but the ending was too quick. I wanted more of the story after the cabin and not rush to the three kids with one on the way. I'd like to know more about their lives and the extended family.

The family repartee alone was worth the read. Vivid imagery and interesting characters. Strong story telling skills, but quite a few minor errors. Overall, it was a very enjoyable read.

Nice story.

Unfortunately, the end is a bit rushed.

Interesting story!

5

Thank you for the story. I liked it, but it feels a bit raw, as in unpolished. I apologize but I can't explain it better. The things I didn't like: unmarked scene breaks make reading it really confusing and annoying; you got the story to the best point where they should work on their reconciliation and introduced Wren, an interesting character, but you just cut it off with a short, abrupt ending that actually doesn't say anything about their life except implying he's successful and she's "barefoot and pregnant".

Good tale and I love how you do dialogue. Uneven and in parts chaotic. The whole panic 5 day trek frankly didn’t make sense. Everything from the beginning of that trek is more of a pastiche of sketch story elements with little connection. Really abrupt ending consisting of disconnected pieces that seem unrelated and unexplained

4 stars

Sorry, not buying this. I was rooting for her to freeze to death, but felt bad because that would make everyone around the selfish cow sad.

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Why the eff did she "need" to get to him so badly that she risked destroying everyone around her? Her apology could wait a week or a year. Not even mentioning minor details like wasting all of MC's money on this stunt.

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I can buy RAACs when the woman literally is willing to sacrifice her life for MC to prove she values him more than herself. This cow didn't sacrifice her life to save, protect, or even help MC. Just to make her selfish self feel better. All about Her Majesty, as always, all the other collateral damage doesn't matter.

I’ve loved your other stories but I lost interest in this one early. The mother son interaction, the other characters interactions were just silly. Didn’t make any sense. I’ve learned to stop reading a story when this happens early on. LM

I agree with whoever said this story seems a bit raw/unrefined. Still a good story. Almost an LW story with how much emphasis went into her "paying penance" which brought on an avalanche of overly dramatic, self deprecating drivel. Maybe the intention was for her to have a cathartic release but I didn't read it like that.