All Comments on 'Jail Breaking'

knowing his blood kin are not cucks because they are swingers, TK U MLJ LV NV

@ Dear Author You are wrong, because your story is a very good BTB. The husband hid big fortune from the wife and he can start his life with big money background.

However I am sad you did not show his future and the future of earlier all family.

5*****

That was one of the best stories I've read in the LW category. I was midway through it and I thought 'unless this guy has a stroke while writing the rest it deserves a five.'

Your characters were believable and not morons and the fact that you made him so flawed was a master stroke.

After reading so much crap in this category, reading your story was pure pleasure.

the husbands who willingly went along with the cheating wives plans.

Nor should we forget Mark, who was eager to bed the wife of another man.

He was not a very nice guy, but he seemed to do his job as a husband and a father. He gave her a chance, she blew it and then tried to play him. Not too smart considering he told her he was on to her. No one in this family was too bright, or honorable. Really, no characters were sympathetic of likable. That aspect detaches the reader from the work. In this case, a case where there is the potential for a lot of pain that is a good thing.

5 stars. However, it would have been better if something had been done about Mark.

dmhack and I must have read different stories. Is there anyone in this tale who is not an idiot and a pompous windbag?

@ Twentyseven There are decent character in the story. The husband is positive character and he was very clever and smart to hid fortune from the wife, when his marriage was good!!!!!!!!!!!! Why do not you like when a betrayed husband gets rid of with success (big money) from a cheating wife and a bunch of cheater assisters? Are you lover of cheating wives? I undertand you in that case.

I liked it. A great read. He was a lot smarter than they gave him credit for. You go through life seeing how to play the game of life, learning on your way that money rules all decision made by people. Some decision might not be right in most peoples eyes but that's how life is. You have to survive it the best you can. He did, they just took him for not seeing everything. CHECKMATE. He wins she lost. 5 stars! Good job Richard...

Beware of the quiet man. He might have multiple excellent reasons to be so. That was the aspect of the story that I appreciated greatly. The all-encompassing estrogen conspiracy designed to emasculate the narrator was a little too solid in its unity. The women were largely variants of one character. Frankly its easier to herd cats then it is to get three or more women to act in unity.

Making the narrator a flawed moral vessel , himself , gave texture to this story. I enjoyed the gilded cage metaphor and the fact that the husband confessed he had never been ' in love ' with Doris in the classical sense of the term. Many exotic bird owners imagine their pet is in love with them , but are careful not to leave the cage door unlatched and the window open and put that sentiment to the absolute acid test. Doris should have followed their example.

The story could have ramped up its humor and the sex. Is it bad to confess , I wanted to know how illicit tryst went ? However , this tale merits five stars based on torrent of thoughts provoked post-read, far more so then many efforts more glib in the telling. Excellent scene btw with main character rebuking his heretofore revered mom. Very harsh, but arguably very merited. Full marks ! *****

being Complacent does not indicate being stupid or idiot... good point

... At least for this site...

I loved it! not for the writing quality but for the plot/characters... Brilliant... now if we could this creative spark with the writing flair of Rehnquist, Josephus, or the Unoriginalist ... then we'd have gold!

5* for a truly novel perspective

First, I thought the plot was quite good, if slightly unrealistic & I really liked the ending; it doesn't need more. BUT, surely there can't really be families like these two, where the women ( & men, I guess) actually believe in this kind of attitude.

Second, the major disappointment, your writing skills, if possible, have dropped even lower than the final chapters of C & P. You seriously need a highly skilled editor to help eliminate the multitude of basic spelling, punctuation & poor engilsh that litter this tale. I had to go back time & again to re read sentences to make sense of what you were trying to say; that spoilt the whole thing for me. I read to enjoy, not to struggle to understand what the author is writing.

I really thought in your first chapter of C & P that a new star was here & whilst you have some great plot ideas, you have continually failed in the mechanics of good writing in expanding them properly. What a damn shame. 2 * *

Someone commented that the characters were not very likable. How could you expect the children to be more moral than their mothers, who were busy cuckolding their willing fathers and raising their daughters to do likewise to their husbands?

The story may seem implausible, but I can relate to being a middle-aged adult attending a family event and being shocked to find out, just like David, how little my parents thought of me and about my perceived place and function in the family. My world turned upside down, after asking what I thought was a relatively benign question.

Fortunately for me, unlike David, mine was not an arranged marriage, and I had a very supportive husband who held my hand on the 2800-mile plane trip home. But like David, I, too, never looked back, and, sans familial expectations, I have had a lot more time to devote to things that mean more to me than family-ordained activities.

Now that I know how it ends, I will go back and re-read it for the sheer pleasure of it!

It would be a much better read with some serious editing. I liked the story a lot. It reminded me of my story, "No Reply" which was absolutely reviled by real men everywhere. Family betrayals create strong emotions in the reader. The premise is hard to believe, but once we suspend our disbelief, it all comes together. I do wonder why he didn't let the other men in his family that had yet to be cuckolded know the score, just for shits and giggles. The fact that sisters, mothers, wives, and daughters all endorsed the betrayal made it a no brainer. In conclusion, I enjoyed the plot and the ending, but technically speaking, this story really needs an editor to reach its potential.

No, NOT swingers, but cucks!

I BELIEVE there was talk of "open" marriage as part of the plotting, but there was little doubt that this family was all about the wives having lovers, NOT the husbands.

I realize suspension of disbelief is a key requirement on this site, but are we to believe that he was the ONLY child in this family to say "NO!" to this life-style?

And that ALL the daughters were able to get husbands who submitted to this crap?

And maybe I missed it, but just how did these two cuckolding matriarchs get together, or was that just the luck of Bill and Doris getting together?

While I like the story well enough to give it 4 stars, I agree with the complaints about the editing.

I realize we were warned upfront that RG couldn't find an editor, but there is some easy self-editing that apparently wasn't done.

One thing I noticed right away was both missing commas and excess commas!

If you simply read the sentence, ideally out loud, and pause at every comma, excess commas will be fairly evident. One example is this sentence from second paragraph:

"She has never been anything, but loving and supporting."

Most people, IMHO, would not pause after the first phrase.

Conversely, if a pause seems needed, then a comma should be inserted, as in THIS sentence, again from the second paragraph:

"It wasn't about love on my side more an act of rational judgment."

Again, in my opinion at least, there is a pause after "side", therefore a comma should be there.

BTW, I happen to be on the volunteer editor list, and have never received a request to edit anything!

But so what? The writing was great and the story line just the sort of stuff us LV guys love to suffer through. Great effort! 5 stars without doubt.

Gave it a five. Very nice intro to the family. Really added to the drama.

Was involved in story, so did not notice grammar problems. More interested in story and emotion and this one was a winner.

To my mind, when you love someone, you go hungry so they can eat. Wife loves, but wants variety. Pissed away her marriage for the new dick - is thst love?

he has all the evidence he needs, all sorts of suits could be filed. Probably belongs in IR not LW.

Following in the tradition of your 'Crime and Punishment', you write stories with plots and characters that have a complexity and ambiguity that approaches real life. Bravo!

Please keep write these rich, adult tales.

I like different. Some of the things said by our hero's family members would have made this old man react more harshly, but then that is me.

The black guy named Mark would have lived his life out with a higher voice, but then that also is me.

Still. Interesting and I enjoyed the tale.

Thanks,

MGM

He needs to sue ALL of them for alienation of affection, and sue the girls to have his name removed from theirs.

Deserves a followup as to the fallout on how the "low life family" he broke free from handles his departure.

This should be in the humor or fantasy categories. While the idea how he reacts is fine, the whole set up is pretty much a joke.

Great story...you have covered all the details. Doris you have Mark. Daughters you have shit. Parents check into the looney bin. My man, take the money and run. Do Not Look Back. As far as the guiled cage, take a dump in it and send it to her COD.

This is a BTB story. Nothing wrong with that per se. The problem with this and so many other BTB stories is that it really crosses the line of fantasy - the hidden millions and the fact that every female character including the daughters have no conscience and are evil people.

Nevertheless, this is well written and I applaud your efforts.

While reading this story i was figuring it was a 3,maybe a 4 star story at most.It was an enjoyable read till i realized the ending was missing,hence the 1 star i gave it.Even i who has never written a story knows the hardest part of a story is coming up with a ending,so obviously this writer couldn't so he chose the ploy too many amateur writers do and ends it saying let the reader IMAGINE the ending,lol. Every single story i have ever read that had an ending, i IMAGINED the way i hoped it would go,but read the stories to find out how the writer saw it should go. Obviously this writer chose NOT to share that with the readers.

overall an entertaining read. Compare it to some of the trash written today in loving wives, there is no contest. That's all I got to say. Thanks for the read. (ML) 4*

@ Dear unbelieable Anon Are the cuckold stories beleivable to show in LW that average heteroxexual husbands like their wives have extramarital sex? Yes the BTB stories are fantasy stories but the best BTB stories go to the next to true life. Why is it unbilievable people has secret fortune? Yes a simple blue collar man may have secret 10pcs golden bars under his father's garden.............and he will use after 5 years to his divorce from his cheating wife. And here we see a top lawyer from New York state!

Different, thoughtful, and quite interesting. Rather unusual in this genre 5*

One person wrote "every female character including the daughters have no conscience and are evil people." Too limiting. EVERY character except for him is a caricature, defined as a comically or grotesquely exaggerated representation someone. Fiction is one thing, but this borders on fantasy or satire.

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That said, even as exaggerated as they might be, there should have been SOME reaction from the other people then the few superficial paragraphs. THAT’S where your incomplete ending lies. We know what he’s going to do, but this is a real slap in the face of everyone else. Do they find out about the money? Do his daughters have any feelings for him? You state he’s close to his mother, but this is a big break from that. How does she react the next day when she has time to think?

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Do you just give up? Did you care so little about your own story that you couldn’t be bothered?

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I like that he stood up for himself, but in the end, it's just "meh."

I would not even come here to read if I wanted to imagine the end of a story but all the rest of it was well written and entertaining. You are a good writer but left me highly disappointed. It's just that the ending pissed me off more than "Gone Girl" and that is a huge statement!

With the women all plotting against him, his jailbreak was pure luck. He is right in not wanting any fur ther contact with them, they were written that way!

Hypocrisy is what the title shout read. After all, he only believed in the sanctity of marriage so long as it followed his rules, otherwise all vets are off. And regardless who donated the sperm to "those two little sluts", it's his name in their birth certificate aye, it's his morals, ethics and behaviour that theirs is based on. They depended on him and frankly, he was only willing to be their father so long as his rules were followed.

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he only reason i gave it 2 stars instead of one was because he grew some balls and left in the end. why would you spend 20 years living like that.what a dumbass, he wasted a good chunk of his life.

@ Wackdoodle You are wrong because the cheating spouses (husbands and wives) are hypocrites who wait automatic forgivinnes from the betrayed spouses and they are surpriss when the betrayed spouses left them. (Sometimes with secret fortune!)

It is very interesting the nazi Germany (Himmler) planned to forbid the divorce.........

Gave it a 3. Interesting story but the lack of a satisfying ending and the sheer level of suspension of belief required for it to work, hurt this story big time. Having every female in the family in on the act was just to much. None of them noticing hubbys weight loss, new clothes, fitness level and hair color was just silly. Even when its mentioned to them, its ignored.

Had to give it 5* though it really was more like 4.6

Excellent story idea, truly well thought out characters, sadly deficient in editing.

Yes you did warn us, but why didn't you look for one?

KarenE says she has her name up as an editor, there are many others, but beware of those who offer to help with spelling and grammer, if they can't spell grammar they're probably not that good.

Really liked that the husband was a flawed human as well, not another candidate for sainthood.

Finely a story without a weak cum drinking husband. Keep writing , loved it.

Perception.

They already had their minds made up about him and did not feel the need to pay attention to him.

Not only that but for their plans to work that is how they needed him to be.

People tend to see what they want to see or what they expect to see, and do not see what is outside of that.

There is a story of a South Pacific island tribe that could not see the sailing ship the explorers that they met had came in, it was too far outside of their idea of reality.

And move on, nothing like dumping a used whore. If you don't believe me ask bonnieTaylor, now theres a dumb whore.

Very good! Thanks for this one!

story worth reading on this site, the good way to end it would have been to get them all on a cruise in the north atlantic in winter and sink the ship, while taking the sick fucking so called authors that wrote their garbage on this day with them in the same ship, what do you think of that you sick fucks.

To find out that the women of your life are all whores and the men married to them are spineless cockholds. Makes his reaction the best for him to work out the rest of his life. To hope they never find him

Well written with a good pace and story line! Excellent!!!

I won't comment on the editing or the characters but on the ending. It ended. OK yes you might want to know what happened in the rest of his life or that of his wife and relatives but that's immaterial to the story. He hid a ton of money and ran off to the ends of the earth with it. He's smart enough to know someplace with the creature comforts and no extradition treaty. Any more is merely unnecessary epilogue. That the author tells us to add an epilogue that he feels is unnecessary well tough. If he had ended it with the antagonist going off to have what turned out to be his last conversation with his wife; well that would have been an unsatisfactory ending (or lack thereof) because everything in his life would still be up in the air. If I was an actual literotica member I'd give this 4* only losing one because he could have found a editor if he tried harder.

a man dies when three things occur- he gets married, he gets a mortgage and he has a child- he is then officially dead- the rest is just waiting for the corpse to rot- this guy has risen from the dead

I'm sorry but how horrible would it be if there mutli generational families like this in real life. Every woman in the family perpetuates a cuckold lifestlye with the mena dn they can't understand when one of the men stands up and say no. Just to satisfy me need for comeuppance i would love to see more of this story with a mutl generational burn the bitches ending

Still too long in unnecessary descriptions, but good plot and well executed.

Some of the parameters seem bizarre though. She waited 2 years to have sex with Mark while he made millions buying and selling property? Her university professorship contributed more to the family budget than his parternship in a law firm??

Definitely one of the 10 most enjoyable stories I have read on this site. It ended with his goodbye. No need for a story to continue beyond that point. If it does, it has to be as another story. I don't even want to know what happens next. I know he will be fine.

The line of credibility is crossed (satire?). Every woman in this tale is an adulterous slut, every man a wimpy cuckold. A strange perception of society! Maybe this author is paranoid or a mysogynist or both.

But despite the grammar &amp;amp; spelling errors I enjoyed this story enough to rate it a clear 4 *.

Perhaps an epilogue would be nice - about how the sluts and their (for 30 years) cuckolded husbands took the bitter pill of truth the protagonist made them swallow!

The spelling error in my comment is not mine: the commenting systems adds letters that I have not written. ("amp;" was inserted when I submitted the comment.)

What's wrong on LIT today?

Would like to see another chapter to make the rest of the family all eat there words and suffer at the hands of David with all of his money. Great story!

The line of credibility is not just blurred, but obliterated, by a narrator who by his own admission is an habitual LIAR (although he pronounces it LAWYER), but that's great...I mean, how much of what he says happened actually happened the way he says it did? Did ANY of what he says happened actually happen, or is he just full of horse shit.

Whether the narrator's description of the marriage between David and Delores is accurate or no, I think it rings true. You so often hear about the woman who "trapped" the man into marrying her, the man who ended up in a marriage, and having children with, someone he never really loved, he's just there because it's the conventional, or the RIGHT, thing to do.

...and I agree that it stands as is...complete. A bit long winded and the time frames and salaries were questionable but not enough for me to complain.

@ SKHP Yes the story has a little satire taste. Do not you know what is it like the nowdays Loving Wives. LW is full of boring and tiresom hotwives with cuckolds stories and a satire with almost everyday behavioral cheating wives, cuckolds and a surprissing normal behavioral husbands is a all Loving Wives satire twist.

However this cuckold story satire is only 50% of this story and the 50% of twist part is excellent BTB story too!

Go David: I would also like to see another Chapter from the others point of view. How did Doris and Daughters do. did everyone go on as usual or did they fall apart. Did Larry Jr. catch on and drop his &quot;skank&quot; . just a few things to talk about.

I seldom get emotional involved when reading stories on literotica. However, I found myself being angered by the deceit and conspiracy of the females in this story. It seems that in today's real live,women especially have lowered their moral standards to think it acceptable to commit adultery and are surprised if there are consequences. I liked this story and the husbands reaction.

One question: why make the" other man" black? That trick has lost it's shock value. Now it's just a cheap shot.

Doris must have an IQ of about 80. I agree with the comments that none of the characters are likeable (except the husband). Interesting and entertaining story, though. Could be entitled "Sluts and Cucks no more."

... because he thinks

New York Penal Code § 250.05 Eavesdropping.

A person is guilty of eavesdropping when he unlawfully engages in

wiretapping, mechanical overhearing of a conversation, or intercepting

or accessing of an electronic communication.

Eavesdropping is a class E felony.

doesn't apply to him. He committed so many felonies every day before lunch you couldn't count them. Suppose she doesn't find out? Suppose she does? She hires a lawyer with a suspicious mind (all of us do) and she shows him her cell phone ... and our hero is in the very deep shit. Besides which, what makes people think that he isn't going to have to cough up a sizable share of the dough when the judge rules?

New York is a no fault divorce state, and our hero is either going to lie on his financial disclosure forms ... I knew a couple of lawyers who got disbarred and went to jail doing this - one for the lying and the other for encouraging the first.

Like all the other Loving Wife stories which are built on complicated plots by revenge seeking husbands which work perfectly the first time - bullshit. This story deserves the one star I give it because it is pure fantasy and not at all what it pretends to be

@ H.H.Morant He has enough money to live in such country where is not any law contract with the USA............The story's direction not only BTB but running husband story too............

@ HHMorant If the husband leaves the USA and do not start divorce only he fucks the exotic bargirls.........The wife could go to divorce for abandon and he could accuse her husband eavesdropping, but she does not get anything and the husband (exhusband) lives in happiness in an exotic country

The Author

"Good question for which I don't have an answer, But I assume a lot of places I am twenty years overdue for a visit," I said.

Dear HHMorent read creampieeating cuckold stories!!!!!!!!!!!!

Hubby is the SHREWEST guy there. HH, where the hell do you think Sweetie's cell phone (containing ALL the proof) is as Hubby walks out the door? Either in the (blazing) furnace or in Hubby's pocket (but only briefly, until he can find a good furnace!)

Loved the story. All the key data were there all along.

5*

But it is only a story. A fantasy and a caricature of life with unreal characters, but why not? It is entertaining, just enjoy it.

Did you read the story moron? What BTB ? Hubby walked.simple.as.that.Question I have is why would he stay.Treated.like something on the bottom of your shoe.No scorched earth just gone.Simple.

@ HHMorant Against your name is on the comment, my comment is common opinion for everybody.

1. The cheating spouses hid their extramarital activity from the inocent spouses.

2. In many countries and USA states the legal system punishes the inocent spouses.

3. It may be such law rules as the eavesdropping is felony in New York state.

4. Why must dear faithful husband mates be CORRECT TO LYING BETRAYING CHEATING WIVES! (and at cheating husbands vica versa!)

5. A betrayed husband (wife) can use the E-spying to know his wife (her husband) have extramarital activity against being felony in New York state!

6. We must forget to react according to XIX century method. Why must the betrayed spouse tell the E-spying information to the cheating spouse???? The XXI century solution in New York state to hid this information and destroy the E-spying instrument as LSD reccomended.

7. Instead to react according to XIX century the betrayed spouse have time to hid more and more fortune from the cheating spouse (he/she gets time).

8. There is not fault divorce in New York state so the betrayed spouse need not tell the betrayed spouse he/she divorces the cheater for cheating. The betrayed spouse MUST NOT TELL he/she used E-spying, because this is felony in New York state.

9. 20 years later the betrayed ex spouse meets accidentally (at the wedding of the grandchild) with the cheater ex spouse and he/she tells (without witnesses) her/him he/she knew her/his cheating and the reason of the divorce was not the snoring during night!

10. Unfortunatally the XIX century solutions causes long time prisons at cheating spouses in many cases nowdays.

11. Good authors show in their modern BTB stories how a smart spouse or the friends can organize good measures against the cheater assisting law system to became the winner in the divorce...........

His big mistake was to believe his wife was a virgin when they made love for the first time...To believe and accept her back...But really if he wanted revenge he had to Burn all his family. So what better revenge than go away free and with millions? HAPPY NEW YEAR TO ALL READERS AND WRITERS OF LW!!!

I especially like the way that we see the man trapped into a marrage he didn't want for a change. Gee, does that ever happen in real life? He gets free!! :)

The ending was perfect. He just walked away. Of course it would have been nice to see how much longer old Marky-Mark would have stuck around seeing as how now all he has is a piece of ass no longer really married nor well to do. All she has now is being white but that will soon wear thin. So his ego and wallet may have taken a hit.

You did need to work on your punctuation. In an effort to avoid comma splices you left them out all together. There were other mistakes, piddly to most of you but those are most injurous to us all. Accept enough small mistakes and soon the big ones don't seem too big. Then disaster happens.

Looking for your next submission.

C

what really gets me about this story is his daughters. the have zero love or respect for him.how does he not notice this all their lives. plus they wouldnt get that way without being taught to think that way. the only person that could do it is their mother. so i dont think she was a perfect wife up to that point. also are we really gonna believe that his wife was faithful all these years considering that every other women in his entire family is cheating also. im sorry this whole story makes no damn sense to me.

His wife held him in place , supported him andstoodby him but the daughters were a surprise, just as bad as the rest of the family. The wanton cheating did not seem real , all those men becoming chuckholds .now they talk the wife into cheating and he sees a way to freedom. Story was good but hard to believe.

it was a fresh, interesting and well conceived idea. But, as others have written, the totality and degree of the cuckolding beliefs among the whole family was neither necessary ( if some of the characters defended him, or were as in the dark as him it would have read better) or helpful. The editing was weak. But the protagonist was a flawed, hurt, proud man. He was not a cartoon, and that saved the story.

Thanks for something different and interesting to read.

Loved it, great story and greater ending!

There are two more stories to tell. Because his last comment does not fit the man he is. Locked in jail as he put it, getting out would be a slow process of rediscovering who he really is and visiting the decadence and flesh pots of the world would bore him because he is ultimately an intelligent man who may have all the money in the world, will need in the end to spend it with someone who loves him and does not use him. The second story would be the hilarious search of his family for him and the realization of what a bunch of assholes they are. It would be fun to see them waste their money and time in search of him and the realization of what kind of people they really are and the realization of those around them. Oh, the questions people would ask the how they would stupidly defend themselves.. No, you have more to write though this would not be a courtroom story or corrupt politician story.

It should have ended with a "One year later". He's on his front deck, talking to a beautiful woman 20 years his junior, in a country with no extradition. In his beach front villa is a very ornate bird cage with his wife's cell phone in it. The story you just read is him explaining the "gilded bird cage" in his living room to his new companion. Ends with a toast to freedom...

Thanks.

I'm damn glad that you didn't make Hubby wimp out like you did in "Crime & Punishment." Thank you for not making a promise that you had no intention of keeping this time around, too.

Well written as usual, with a convoluted plot worthy of your talents. While the legal aspects might not be totally legit, your writing skill more than makes up for those missteps. Excellent tale, RG. Keep 'em coming, but please no more forced RAACs like C&P again!

I'm glad that you learned about the problems associated with betraying your readers. NEVER make a promise that you can't or won't keep, as far as your plotlines go. That's one of the cardinal rules of writing, and being taken seriously in your craft.

5 Solid Stars.

Like many others, I see the potential for additional chapters, but that's as much my greed as a reader to have things completed to my satisfaction as anything else. It would be interesting to see the fallout in the family and if any of the other males every grew some balls or if any of the females questioned their choices. Seeing how his daughters reacted and if there was any hope for them to be anything other than the shrews their grandmothers where shaping them to be.

In any case, despite a little lack of editing, it was a well conceived and written story and I hope to hear more from you in the future.

That's all I've gotten to so far and I have to say after hearing his girls say she should fuck mark I'd kill em all play the tapes for the Da Ad claim insanity

the ending is awful. I mean wretched on so many levels... FIRST why is he bothering to even TRY and work on the marriage? Hus wife WANTS to be a whore... His sister in law is... His own mother is... His mother in law is... And his daughters think he us the stupidest most useless turd ever....

So WHY even try.?

SECOND...the author builds this over whelming case about how every one thinks he is slow stupid obtuse and dull. Simply having him walk out is too abrupt and the reader is denied the joy of seeing the reactions and realizing the husband isnt a idiot

Great story, way to tell a story and deliver. The intro set the tone (had some doubts). However, the ending reaffirmed what you said in the intro. It was truly a gem, their lies were the very thing that was their downfall. Poetic justice, enough said. Ta very much!!!

thog4u

The best revenge is a life well lived.

As fun as BTB stories are, in the real world Revenge is no substitute for post divorce bliss, and getting there as soon as possible.

The ending was fine, because this guy was on his way.

Excellent story. I love the contradiction that the early struggles in his marriage caused him to become a crook which in turn enabled him to act contrary to what emerged as a family tradition of accepted cuckoldry. Excellent.

Ending would be redundant; we all know how it ends in any event. Little grammatical errors, occasional lapses with respect to punctuation, and a bit of excessive narrative were not enough to negate a nicely-flowing original story with a timely BTB ending. Five stars for this one.

... It was an excellent story and needs no additional chapters, other then the investment of affection this reader has for the main character. Therefore I would enjoy a whore filled victory lap of sorts for David. It would be fun for David to hear the laments of various family members as he proved that he is not old or fat or in need of any of them. Panther fan.

great story and glad that he held to his beliefs through the end. granted he got married when not in love but he did hold true to his vows which it looks like not one of the females in this story did. that shows no respect to the males in this story. keep writing

Their needs to be a second part please my imagination sucks, second part I am in my knees right please second

For me at least, it was a perfect ending. I read it and then my imagination had fun with the possibilities. Excellent work.

M

but needed a bit more to push it over the top. What did Doris think after her session with Mark? How did she act that night at home?

Entertaining read, a real pack of jackals the women and men are in that family, and couldnt help but lead the reader to root for the narrator.

Would love to see you continue this series.....

i liked it a lot.

What a Family. and What a Story!

It IS true, that the protagonist broke free and left a horrible situation behind, so all's well that ends well?

Not for me. This was like sitting, listening to fireside stories in hell.

My problem is that it seems by design that every single character mentioned in this story, from beginning to end, was totally and utterly bereft of a shred of morality and decency.

In the end, it was just a putrid mess, where every single woman was a whore, and every single man was a caged, tamed, pathetic cuckold and all were conspirators... with the exception of our 'hero'.

The only reason that he did not become the next in a long line of cum-slurping cuck wimps, is that he was already a bad person to begin with. It wasn't that it was his 'stupid, childish male ego' making him obstinate, it was that the disclosure of all the deception on everyone else's part allowed the 'hero' to drop the pretense of decency that he had cultivated all his life, and now, he was sailing into the sunset to enjoy a life of debauchery, all paid for by his ill-gotten gains... money that he had accrued by being as bad as any officer of the law can be.

Thank God AngiqueSophie liked this alot. It reaffirms to myself, why I dislike her so much.

And RichardGerald, while I do appreciate your effort in writing, work on punctuation, and break-up of the sentences. Don't misunderstand, I am no Chomsky,... I am probably better described as a literate handicap. I probably could not produce a story as well as you. All I am trying to do here is offer you an idea of what to focus on to improve.

Just because I did not like the story matter, does not mean I don't appreciate your work.

Posted under 'anon' with full intention, just for you 'named' anon retards.

While I agree with your comments on the story, what the fuck does AngiqueSapphic have to do with the story? You have your opinion, and AngiqueSapphic has her opinion. BOTH are allowed.

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Comment on the story without trashing others for daring to have a different opinion.

First, one anony insults AngiqueSophie by calling her AngiqueSapphic... and then another anony comes to her rescue, but continues the insult by calling her AngiqueSapphic three times in his comment!

Too fucking funny!

Enjoyable read, RG, but I tend to feel the same way as a few of the commentators, there are no good guys in this, and if he had been a real, stand-up man and proper father in the first place, he wouldn't have finished up where he was in the end.

As a matter of fact, he wouldn't have married Doris in the first place if he had any moral fiber.

Ah well, 3 stars from me.

@ NotMissingAnyNuts The negative characters are a very good satire of the nowdays Loving Wives. 90% self centered cunt wife and creampieeating cuckold stories. However the author does not follow the boring tiresome same and similar dirty stream of story and the main character gets off the compiled cuckold life from his relatives with a good BTB twist.

Interesting the newer surweys show the marriage as a good aim for male people decreased among the 25-30 years male age group in USA.... Does everybody want to be bull instead of husband?

The cuck stories decreases the marriage aim for heterosexual young male readers, but good BTB stories, where the divorced ex husbands find better second third wives may be good effect for young male readers...............

Didn't really have anyone to root for in this tale. Your main characters always react much meeker than I would.

4* says it all :-)

Pretty decent story, all the women expecting David to go along with there version of life, the other husbands and his father. That's the real conflict. When you were describing his early relation with his mother, I thought some thing was up. I never expected this. I'm glad he rode on out. Some how your story missed my mark, but I don't know how to describe it better than you did.

Thanks for pissing me off on womankind *~* I always thought they were in cahoots...