All Comments on 'Jake and Danny'

A god story . Part 2 should be even better

This was a hot story. It made me want to feel his cock sliding into my virgin ass. I do hope there will be more chapters about these two guys.

I have a virgin ass also, but the writer conveys what I imagine (hope?) anal sex would be like. I realize there will be some discomfort at first, but the reward might just be worth it. If not, I simply won't do it again. I guess only time (and luck) will tell.

To the author: I'm eagerly awaiting "... the rest of the story."

I remember when I lost my butthole cherry and what it felt like. I want to read Danny's experience. I love first time stories. You have left us hanging and if you don't fix it I will write another comment that isn't complimentary. :) Rating withheld pending part 2.

Love it keep going.

Dude, put something in the text to mark when you switch the point-of-view. Maybe a line all by itself with a bunch of underscores or something. It's a bit hard to follow.

Thank you for noticing...

I did do that...I made Danny's comments in regular type and Jakes comments in bold type.

I copy and pasted the text and lost the bold face of Jake's comments...so I loaded Chapter 2 as a .rtf meaning Rich Text Format and am hoping that the bold face type will carry over...but I'm also wondering if that is the reason that this chapter is taking so long to get posted...I don't know, but it's been waiting for moderator's approval for over a week...we'll see...Thx for reading and taking time to comment...G

very hot and erotic story well told and got me hard and wanting some..going to read part 2 now...10 pts

Held off peeing until I finished reading. Got the biggest boner. Hell, I can always pee later! LOL... An orgasm with a full bladder just feels so much more intense. Thanks!

i remember my first exp right on

so so hot

wish i was there

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I was just returning the favor of reading your work since you read mine...I'm glad we met. I found this to be a very unique style which I've never run across in my many years here on Lit. Bummer about the format issue...But that aside, I liked the way you used the first person point of view with two separate voices. I also liked the believable scenario of the seduction and the descriptions of the physical aspects. Off to read chapter 2 ;)

Stupid switching between points of view. Even if they were marked, it is ridiculously often.

I found it a bit confusing switching back and forth between viewpoints (which is not to say I didn’t enjoy it). It needed something specific to acknowledge the other character was speaking. Maybe an identifier indicating switching of speaker

the different points of view were too confusing to follow.