All Comments on 'Jamaican Escape'

Might as well get rid of her now; nothing but a slut. No longer a loving wife; just wants to be used by guys; definition of a slut.

the bitch is ruined and he'll be raising Jamaican kids in no time.

Congratulations!!!!!!!!

Excellent story!!!

I love the way you write, how you increase the level of exciting throughout the story!!! 5 stars!!!

There is a good story in here but it is lost in grammatical, formatting and punctuation errors. Have an editor do some (or maybe a lot) of polishing and this could be a good story.

Little gay boys posing as men, perhaps next year one of them will fuck you in the ass, poor kids, two sluts as parents, yuck.

Too bad. This story was onto something. The Europeons believe ,as do I, that a woman's prime years extend up to age fifty. After that, things start to wind down slowly on a raw aesthetic basis. Joan Collins had that circa ' Dynasty' . Deb owned that too, as described in the story. The unplanned, initial tryst had an excellent ' now or never' vibe .

I prize a beautiful woman of a certain age & that quality, but that last reveal went over the top. Deb would have been making repeat trip to Jason as a single woman. Its a personal decision but I'd rather be snowboarrding then endure that encore. Not worth it sans spontaneity.

not worth reading.

Great story. Would have been even better if Jason were a black Jamaican stud. Wish that were my wife.

not a bad story plot but the spelling leaves something to be desired.

I don't understand because you spell a lot of difficult words but screw up simple ones such as:

new instead of knew

in sane instead of insane

no where instead of nowhere

site instead of sight

& others.

I agree with Gordo12. A not bad story would have been much more enjoyable with more attention to detail and spelling/wrong words is just one area that needs improvement; loose for lose, where for were, have for half, seamen for semen, site for sight, here for hear and see for sea to name a few.

Also the conversations were at times confusing as you crammed all parties into the same paragraphs rather than separating them.

1*

As we all know, once a woman is blacked she never goes back. So i was starting to think that this story of a supposed one off encounter was highly unbelievable . The story was saved by the final paragraph, where we learn that the wife is a confirmed black cock whore, who will shortly be begging to be continually black gang fucked pimped out, and bred. This, i am led to believe, is the secret desire of most outwardly respectable married white women. Or so im told

Well, they got it, this piece of shit story belongs in interracial or gay, is this really your fantasy vacation, watching a bunch of niggers fuck your wife while you jack off.

"Once they go black we don't want them back:

baffons who are delusional,just like racist white people.

What CAN you do?

Assuming a kernel of truth in the story, the author can:

A) Adjust ages. Sweetie is fiftyish, Bull is early 20s.

A hottie at 50? No sweat. Early20 is going to see

'older than my Mom!' Sweetie won't know anybody

Bull is talking about - and vice versa. Unrealistic they

will be having sex 24/7! Make her early-mid 30s!

B) Have Hubby get concerned. He has excellent reason.

Maybe he shares it with Sweetie, maybe not...maybe

BOTH!

C) Consider ending. A week gangbanging callow youth?

What CAN'T you do?

A) Insult the reader by using IGNERNT word skills!!!

3* and very generous at that.

Here is my suggested finish: have the two return to Jamaica, but hubby leaving her there and returning home and moving away to start his new job in another state. Not under a false name, but just gone from her. Then have the story focus on her regrets and feelings.

At least two of the friends needs to be female. If not, divorce time.

Excellent story from start to finish. The wife and I have had many such adventures.

5 Stars !!!!

VERY hot story. Hope you write more.

Yes this story is a fantastic fantasy, one everyone dreams of. Just please get an editor, or read it out loud, DO SOMETHING! At times your grammar and spelling was so distracting it was hard to keep a straight face. Please, it doesn't hurt to re-read, or re-write.

she's a slut now she don't love him already planning what about once in a live time when she want too go back to fuck the nigger again and his friends he should leave her there go home and move away

Why anyone would write about a 50 to 60 year old hag is beyond me.

Any attempt to make it sexy is a huge turnoff.

always pityful comments..... you are boring

More likely a gay guys fantasy, yuck.

Fuck annony, he's a real asshole. Keep on writing, I gave you a 5

You need to learn how to use all the forms of there, here and to correctly

to your great story. you need another chapter and another trip!

Because thats who gets off on this, signs everywhere in Jamaica warning about A.I.Ds. You need to get out of your moms basement.

Loved your story, don't be concerned about their comments. I've been there and I would have set up next year exactly the same way and, guess what? My husband would have loved it. He's the alpha male and has no regrets that I'm who I am. Keep writing.

Other than a story to barf to you have talent...NOT!

I read and enjoyed these two stories. Love it. I want to read the next chapter, when they come back and she has 4 young men to play with.

As you write, the gramatical and spelling errors will improve.

I enjoyed the read.

I fantaized this was my wife and I, and would love to live it.

Thanks for a very hot read

Joe

Never understand why any man would think it was okay for his wife to turn into a slut and expose them both to every disease in the book. What's sexy or interesting about that?

Love the story. Nothing gets an older girl going than fresh cock, particularly nice when husband is there to share her. Too bad no guy/guy action - that would be hot xoxoxoxoxo Annette

I see you have inspired your penultimate fan. You go old girl.

Hot.

Pile of dog shit.

Why do I get a feeling this will not turn out well? If she has become a big cock whore that quickly she is not going to wait until next year.

Nothing better than hot sex for my Sunday morning read. Good story brought back a wild couple of hours for me with a BBC. It wasn't Jamaica but another Caribbean island where we were vacationing from the Pennsylvania cold. I met a good looking black man, a Canadian laughing, fleeing his even colder weather. He was there with some buddies and we'd been exchanging glances for a couple days by the pool, he was at least ten years younger than me. My husband was off whacking the sacred little white ball and I'd been at the pool for some time trading stories, trips and insights with him. I suggested getting a couple of drinks so we walked over to the little cabana bar and he ordered rum drinks (too strong for me). My nipples were hard and he was also visibly aroused, the sexual tension was clearly there for the two of us waiting to be released. He suggested taking in the ocean view from his room, drinks in hand I walked with him upstairs to his room, wow he was right the view was great. I lost my bikini on the balcony and sans his swim suit, WOW did the view improve, I dropped to my knees and started sucking his BBC, he picked me up and we fucked for two hours. My first time cheating and my first BBC, he just didn't have that wonderful Jamaican accent. Not sure why the wtf I did that but it was wonderful.

there simply isn't a better time to let your wife enjoy bbc than on Vacation

Sadly their marriage is doomed. Will go from one a year to her running around his back. Pandora's box. She will lose respect for her husband. He will either become a willing cuck or frustrated.

Crazy story, hot in places but way more than I expected or could believe could happen. The wildest thing for me was having sex with a hot married guy I met on a college break with my folks and two brothers at Disney's Caribbean Beach. I was sitting poolside talking with his very pregnant wife, after a quick dip, as I dried off I could feel his eyes peeling my bikini away. She didn't see me grin or wink at him, OMG was my heart was thumping. Later as I gathered my stuff to go I flashed him...my room number. An hour later I came hard as soon as his tongue hit my clit and soon had another couple of loud, hip rocking orgasms, as he fucked me, he pumped harder and faster into me finally tensing up, grunting as his cock pulsed and filled me with his cum. He said it was lucking great. We fucked three more times that week. That night my mom later commented at dinner, I seemed to be in great spirits. "Oh, the sun, the water...the rides, the fun."