All Comments on 'Jezebel's Tale Ch. 01'

Pretty hot. But, the inconsistent viewpoint (jumping from first to third person and back) is really jarring.

Oh and those things on your feet are 'heels'

Those were supposed to be Jezebel's thoughts, told from third person. not first person. Despite not using the pronouns I or me I can see what you are talking about since I only said she thought once then followed it with three paragraphs of stuff. I will try and make that clearer in the future using single quotes or something.

Jezebel knows exactly what to say!

Jezebel is a great character in a hot story. Nice job!

Great start to the series but the atrocious spelling and grammar mistakes completely stop the story flow. A reader should never have to stop reading to figure out what the hell a sentence means.

Spelling mistakes are sloppy workmanship and unforgivable !

Clunky beginning but got better, thanks!