by Magicwrtr
Some issues with tense, but otherwise entertaining. You open with, "Jezebel wakes up about 9...". Should be woke upto flow with the story.
Do you really not know this is misspelled?
“ She put on some 4 inch healed red shoes”
Two sentences later ( Breasts- there are two of them)!
Healed vs Heeled, this ancient history, but google/MS word spellcheck have a lot to answer for, correctly spelt words, but in the wrong context. Ugh!