All Comments on 'Jezebel's Tale Ch. 26-28'

Your story has had me on the edge on my proverbial chair for a while now. Please keep our lovely succubus alive and free with her friends. It is possibly time for the old guard to retire and help instead of being power mongers. You have a good many different threads going on in this story to completely fill a third volume/book. Your stories have a good measure of excitement and adventure for our imaginations to work with. Thank you for your writing and dragging the lot of us along for the 'excellent' adventure (as in Bill and Ted's). You help us to keep our minds young and fertile. Please do continue

The difficulty of books where the main character is too powerful is that nothing is a challenge anymore. You have masterfully avoided this by putting her in a position where her combat ability is not the issue but her political power is. It has made for a delicious drama which gives all the characters a realism they would not otherwise have had. I especially like how penny and Patricia have been dynamic characters from the perspective of Jezebel. Do not worry about kicking your main character this book she will do plenty of kicking in the next. It is necessary to make a dire situation for the finally.

Very good story line with few mistakes....looking forward to the next edition!!

Again, I like your writing but WAY too much sex that is not needed for the storyline. I find myself just skipping paragraphs until they put it back in their pants. How many times can you read about her getting blasted with "baby batter" until it's just not interesting anymore. Good story but lost a star just for the over the top amount of fuck scenes.

I’ve read some of your later work and thoroughly enjoyed it, this could do with a complete rewrite though. Apart from the grammatical issues - of which there many, my main gripe is that Jez & Sandy didn’t seem to have to struggle for anything they ever gained or accomplished, which ends up making the plot a bit processional and somewhat juvenile in places, the ridiculous amount of sex is just one example of that. I know this was one of your early works, so I’ll leave it there, but if this was a school report, it would say “Can do better, needs to apply themselves.”. 4⭐️