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Click hereAs Marie got off me Nikki moved forward and zapped my cock again. It was a strange dichotomy as I felt both the week limbs and pleasant after sex feeling but somehow the lust and anticipation of my cock pleasuring another of my lovers. I was drowning in pleasurable sensations.
The ladies held me down as they shifted positions. I could taste Mia's honey as she lowered her soaked pussy on to my mouth. Marie and Nikki were cleaning off Mia's and Pia's pussy juice off my fingers with their warm and tantalizing lips and tongue before mounting them. I felt Pia's mouth suck my cock clean of Marie's honey before I felt her tight warmth wrap around my cock.
Pia was normally gentle in bed but she must have been horny as hell because she rode my cock hard. When I started arching my back and meeting her thrusts with my own while licking her sisters pussy and dark hole she started to gasp with each thrust, mewling with pleasure as she simply rutted herself with abandon on my pole.
I couldn't see but I felt Nikki and Marie lean their bodies, one toward my head and the other toward my feet and I started to hear kissing. My cock got harder and I had to fight cumming at the thought of what they were doing to each other as the used my body to service their hot wet cores. I curled my fingers inside Nikki and Marie and found their G-spot and they all started cumming again drenching my body with all their honey.
This continued for two more rounds as they each took a turn on both my hands, my cock and my face. I didn't imagine this would happen often, getting all four at once. To be honest two were much more manageable and I felt less like I was pleasuring them then being used by them for pleasure. However they also had the other girls to pick up any slack I left in attentions.
I reminded myself to thank Gabby as soon as I got the chance. I heard my sexy angel snicker at my thoughts as she extended my current orgasm with a burst of power and I thought no more for a time...
- COMMENTS
Anonymousalmost 8 years agoLike the story but bit confused on your vampires. From chapter 3 "Yes, they aren't intrinsically evil like demons, but they do live on dark energy which is generated from feeding on blood" you made it different from normal vampires, instead of simply stating they feed on blood, you specifically state they feed off the dark energy in the blood. Then you go on to say in this chapter that his blood is "amazing" to Gabby because his light energy removed all impurities... ummm... how does that make any sense at all?? She feeds off dark energy in the blood, therefore the more dark energy in there, the more tasty it would be, ergo with his lack of dark energy, his blood should've been the opposite and very bland by this logic. It's your story but logically speaking that scene made no sense at all because of you stating their need to feed on dark energy, if you'd left it alone it'd have been fine lol... I agree with the other users a bit though, even though I like the story, the fights need work and admittedly you're giving him too much powers too fast and not enough details. And while he wouldn't know everything, you could write something simple like, as he was desperately thinking of his friends he started sensing something, some twisting energy in the air and when he directed his energy towards it he opened the teleport. Something, ANYTHING, would've been better than just having him instant learn it and go poof. Still like your story however these points detract from a 5 star and push it down to a 3 in my opinion.
Anonymousover 9 years agoYour fight scenes are too short.
This is like the 4th time where you've had some sort of bad guy and he ends up dead in 1 move.
The demon got obliterated.
Then the vampire master got blasted in 1 shot.
Then the elder vampire got blasted in 1 shot, after shooting Jim with a pistol.
And Mr.Super Necromancer captures him and then proceeds to get his head kicked off.
Your characters are good, the sex is hot, but your fights need work.
Magicwrtrover 10 years agoAuthorMost of your complaints point more toward you not liking first person than my writing. You don't like when things are not explained to you as they happen. Well in first person it doesn't work that way. If Jim doesn't understand how he opens a portal, well neither will you. Jim isn't god either, so random surprising shit happens, its how life works after all. In a single point of view when he does something it has consequences, and he wont see those coming until they are there, so the reader wont either.
Thanks everyone else for your encouraging comments and helpful advice.
