All Comments on 'John Smith Inc.'

On the plus side, you have a cure for insomnia.

Make it a longer entry next time. Pretty please

boring

I am glad to see you reviving this story. It is one of my all time favorites. I am looking forward to reading the rest of the story.

Glad Mr Smith is back, wondering what machinations you can get him into.

yey

Yay JOHN is back I was hoping that you’d do a spin off series thank you.

I've read most of your stories and enjoyed them. However, you have a lot of grammatical / editing errors. If you need help with editing, I'd be happy to proof your stuff.

Great start. I’m looking forward to more of this!

Oh, and 5 stars for you

Thanks for the feedback.

Those of you that write will understand how the creative process works. I needed the right circumstances to occur. Admittedly, the first chapter wasn't something to jackoff to, but the groundwork needed to be laid. Now that it has, I can proceed.

Lobosolo, I will take you up on the editing, Please check your email.

Patience, I've got some good ideas brewing.

I do have some challenges that impact my writing time.

Nevertheless, the second chapter is well on it's way.

You strokers will have plenty to enjoy.

"Gift" was the first multi-chapter story I finished here on Lit.

I thoroughly enjoyed it, and I see this spin-off as another great read!

It's off to a great start anyway.

Glad John and the crew are cumming back!!

Can't wait to see where the exploits of John Smith and crew take us now!

Didn't like the part about the married women getting laid at work. First series John would have been fixing the negative feedback of this before it happened. I hope this second series isn't typical of these stories. The first series was as good as some main stream books if it was toned down a bit.

Do you review this stuff before you post it? How can anyone think this sentence is good enough:

“Stepping out of the elevator and into the new offices only recently inhabited the new CEO, strolled across the marble floor, her designer heels clicking loudly as she past the large receptionist desk.”

Really - what the fuck?

Hope there was a point to this opening chapter...

Seated in the large plush conference room were all the department heads, eight in all. (8) This being John Smith Inc., it was a diverse group of five women and four men. (=9)

Yeah, a nice little bridge story from the earlier series, ... quite a few 'strange' word and sentence structure choices, ... I am back to that assuming that you are very talented 'English as a second language' writer, ... as long as you have a decent proofreader / editor to help keep the wrong word, spelling errors and tense problems down, it should be fine, ... and your earlier work was a compelling read even when you were self-editing and leaving in a ton of boo-boos. I am looking forward to more fun with some beloved story characters, ... and to see what world improvements our young Ring of Power welder is going to pull off now. teamed with his wife (the Ring of Chastity welder), April is a real sweetie, ... ;-) TTFN

A little OTT to say the least.