by qualitywheat
his beak is bigger than his belly, but the greed takes 1st place. TK U MLJ LV NV
I think you forgot the last section that explains how the tumor from the start of the tale was not benign and she was losing her mind in a hospital bed as it grew and destroyed her brain.
She in her twisted mind insisting she loves her husband and family does everything possible to destroy her marriage, her family, and since the twit is fucking all over, her health. If this was in twisted humor it would make more sense. Really have no interest in reading about braindead women that think with their cunts.
I would say that you have a real problem, as does your twisted tale.
Qualitywheat telling your readers to behave themselves? might help if you wrote something with some substance. She just proved she doesn't give a flying fuck about her family.
I quit reading after she called her husband "her worthless stupid ignorant fool of a husband." Then you claim she loves her husband more than anything else? The FUCK?!? How do you love someone who is worthless?
Seems to be a new crop of male bashing bitch writers cropping up on this site. Too bad, last thing this site needs is a bunch more male bashing bitch writers.
ranting and raving since there wasn't enough young boyz in the story I guess, what a weirdo
taking it in the poopchoot like a boss, or is that like a caboose, either way it is cornhole city for that rump ranger
The Tale flowed well, very well, rollickingly well, in fact. You really needed a Break, an intermission, or something just before, or just after the "Kevin didn't know it but" paragaph. Call it Epilogue, even.
And of course you're not taking seriously the bashers who claim "same old, Same old" as if there was something Wrong with consistency.
Well Worded,
Cheers, and Thanks,
Kilroy
Yup.
A crappy one.
Many don't find a story about bitchy wives, who reward their husbands that take care of them and treat them well by fucking other guys, erotic or even nice. The women are ungrateful sluts. The story has no fairness or justice, only villains.
The theme makes the story.
However, if you like stories about the bad guys winning, this one is for you.
Suggest a disclaimer at the beginning so that those who don't share this interest can just give it a pass.
If he does not know about it, everything is OK?
You can cheat all you want fuck the world over and as long as your spouse does not know everything is OK.
Hell become a 9 to 4 whore and make money while your at it. Because the difference between a slut and a whore is semantics.
How would she feel if she turns 55, kids are gone and he has hidden the money away, and dumps her slimy ass for a sexy 30 year old babe and moves off shore?
with her type of love I hate to see what she would do if she hated him. i hope the wife gets a disease and dies, divorce is to good for her. I hope he loves her enough to let her have as much freedom she can have divorcing her.
because Tina gets on a boat and goes to meet the family in the islands, and then takes the boat home (living safely out of pressured aircraft), while Kevin has a lonely four weeks. It is also completely unreal to talk about "loving" her husband, because NOW she has "discovered" her sexuality, and no cock within sight will be safe from her explorations!
Since Anon used the word 'spouse' and not 'wife', I assume he hates cheating husbands too. If that really is the case, he would seem to be in a tiny minority on this site, where inequality rules supreme.
Someone else got it right. far too 2 dimensional and some trite writing. calling him everything from pig to dog was actually funny. like er, cat, ant or bug or something? that'll rain it down on him, the bastard. But thanks for taking the time author, for that you get 5*...
Tremendous lead. Loving wife, adoring husband, great kids, and a snake in the grass. Great potential! Then you went nuts and screwed the whole thing up. Apparently you believe she can be madly in love with her husband and kids while cheating and lying constantly. This is the situation that alchoholics and drug addict find themselves in. Complete and utter CRAP!!! One star is too many!
Most of it was horrible I don't know about the rest I banged out and filed it under utter claptrap.
Bad, bad, awful. Try again. I feel you can do a lot better.