by Xarth
The whole premise and process of this story was just so well done. At the heart of it it is a romance. Wonderfully told.
what a so very beautiful story you wove . awesome , thank you for this. of course i'd love to read more.
Putting out what is probably now one of my favorite stories on the site.
You've got great writing talent. I'm not sure about the rest of your work, as I don't read Incest, but this is excellent. You've made a very tried and old pairing concept and have added a spice of excellence to it with your words. Though, if I'm to be honest, this concept (The sexy gender-fluid demon and the girl) is pretty tame, even with dick growth and usage. However, that's just me having seen quite a lot from this specific genre.
This is absolutely beautiful: sexy and touching and very funny. Many thanks, Q.
I enjoyed this a lot, it was cute and sexy while also constantly reminding the reader that Lilith was no ordinary woman.
I liked this. I enjoyed both characters. Lilith was a little too inscrutable and didn't seem to be vulnerable enough. That said, I enjoyed the dialog, the banter. And the sex was hot, including the magic monster cock. I think the pregnancy angle was novel. 5🌟
Just..I loved it so much! I have been away from Lit for so long, and now i am totally imspired to get my ass in writing mode again. Thank you!!
I loved that i could have sensed and felt every emotion in what you wrote and it felt real to me. Thank you.
...are a master! Amazing work! I found the optional part to be just that, didn't need it. Although I would have liked Angela pleasing Lilith for once... Hope there's a sequel with details of that.
It is paced wonderfully and the writing is smooth and exciting. Definitely will be coming back to reread this again!
I remember how much I enjoyed this story when it was published. It stuck with me so I reread it, and I have to say that it's just as much fun the second time around. Angela's progression from fear to acceptance to friendship and then to love was well told, with amusing dialogue and interplay between Angela and Lilith.
I'm usually perfectly happy for an author to end a story wherever they like, but in this case I wouldn't mind finding out what happens next. Sure, they raise a family, but it could be fun to read what that's like.
Another first-rate, satisfying tale from Xarth.
... Can't express how much I enjoyed this story, the relationship between Lilith and Angela is just addicting!
5 star rating with hope for more of these two lovers story!!
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I believe I've found another favourite author. Excellent work, thank you so much for posting and sharing this!
Warm, fuzzy , beautifully written and paced perfectly. The pregnancy bit was a nice touch... But still not sure about it. I liked it but i dont think its quite as good as the rest.
This is a very sweet story, light, with a touch of cinnamon. It danced around the danger of this relationship, but didn't dwell on it. Really, the consequences are for Lilith in this relationship, but she just doesn't care. She likes Angela, loves her, and that's good enough for her, so, by extension, it's good enough for us.
I loved Angela falling for Lilith, bit by bit, and I particularly loved Lilith's delight of Angela's fall. This couple was meant to be together, and, they were: a happy ending to a happy story. Thank you for sharing it with us.
A bit long but i feel it needed to be. The slow seduction and them falling in love it's just amazing! Great work
Thoughtful, intelligent, humerous, engaging, erotic and wonderfully inventive. Xarth, you write some amazing stories. Thank you.
Really enjoyed that, thank you. Would be nice to hear more of this and how their relationship progresses.
I just realized what I disliked about the alternate epilogue...
Not the fact she got pregnant... they makes for some interesting potential...
No, what bothered me is that by virtue of some of the things Lilith said at the end the whole she maybe fell in love with Angela was cheapened because it's now not as rare as she led us to believe... after all, she's already done family stuff before...
Not saying we have any idea of how long she's been alive or how many families or how long since the last one... but its definitely no longer a once in a lifetime "where did that come from" kind of thing...
Everything was so romantic and sexually enticing the second you move to last page things just start to move very fast and suddenly we realise there was no romance at all but that can be consider a good thing of a sequel which I'm hoping.
There are some nice touches here, seemingly-minor plot elements that accumulate emotional weight as the story progresses, such as the lullabies, Lillith's growing interest in cooking, and the clever recasting of the parable of the scorpion and the frog (as Pyra and Guarus). And some pitfalls are neatly sidestepped, like the tendency of many authors in the nonhuman or erotic-horror genres to overexplain or to insert lengthy and momentum-killing catalogs of demonology. That said, I do think Angela's character could have been fleshed out a bit: she reads as a bit of a cipher, and while I can see how this would be useful to the author, a little more detail would help to deepen the reader's investment in her and her budding relationship with Lillith. Finally, I think the author has done an excellent job of pacing the story: it never feels rushed leading to the sex (which is, after all, the central event of the plot), nor does it flag once the relationship has been (quite hotly) consummated. I rarely read supernatural stories but really enjoyed this one.
This needs a sequel (Disregard the optional epilogue if you must). The story is just too good to stop here.
This is epic! Who would have thought, something in this genre would be so good! I've read many Lilith stories and this is at the top! Thank you!
just read this for the second time and its still a great story. Many thanks for sharing with us and please keep up the good work... :)
Nossa essa historia foi perfeita desde o começo ao fim.
Amei toda a interação das personagens foi tão fluido e constante, ou seja perfeito....
Muito obrigada....
Gisa.
I loved the growth of the relationship between Angel and her demon, it was so sweet and to be honest I really loved the optional ending. Great work!
I love your kinder, gentler Lillith, and Angela’s eventual acceptance. Thanks for a paranormal romance, the story really worked well, very fun.
I genuinely adored this all the way through and it's just, that perfect combination of sweet and sexy. You did a great job!
That was the most (only?) wholesome succubus story I've ever read. I was NOT expecting that to get that romantic and positive. You basically turned a NonHuman story into a Loving Wives or something. It was like a magic trick. (Also could not stop reading. It's 4 am and I'm grinning like an idiot.) Never stop writing, Xarth.
Such a deliciously good story with incredible seduction!! I want to read the rest of this author now - great skils!
Hands down one of my favorite stories. I want more and I always come back to re-read this. It’s sexy, the characters feel real, and the end always brings a small tear to my eye. When I read this I think it’d be perfect to be drawn as a manga. Just absolutely beautiful writing.
I hope you write the story of the cute little demon child growing up fast with Angela and Lillith! Love your story, the banter and lighthearted Buffy like tone was perfect and fun, not to mention the slow sex developing. More!
Great story. Excellent character development. Humorous but also very touching. I just want to know when this will be adapted to the big screen.
Hot freaking damn, this was a wonderful read! It grabbed my attention from the first paragraph to the last, and both the characters were extremely engaging all the way through as they developed
This is very well put together, though the thing that holds it back from a 5 for me is the same as with Futa House, which I couldn't finish. It's the disregard of boundaries and the negating of consent that bothers me. I like the stories in which a character is unsure what they want, or afraid to ask for what they want. It's the rapiness of refusing to accept a "no" that bothers me. It wouldn't bother me if you weren't such an awesomely skilled writer.
This story is great, it reminds me of small packages by thanagar. In the way that i had decent expectations coming in and well they were blown out of the water
This is my favorite slow burn story I've ever read. Granted, slow burns are not my typical picks however that does not mean that I won't reread this a couple dozen times like with the other stories I read.
Best story ever written. Read it so many times and love it every time. My absolute favourite and always will be.
This story has everything I love in it. An all-powerful demon that falls for the girl-next-door? Yes, please! And Angela (eheh, I see what you did there), I mean, she doesn't drool and drop her jaw (and her drawers) on page one, but holds her own, has her own cares and worries, and, bonus, has a personality? Yes, please! I just want to hug both Lilith and Angela, and kiss little Angela's baby-belly. Sigh. So cute! ~ kisses, `phina
Your humanization of Lilith is what makes this such of good little romp of a tale. There's something so antithetical about a soul eating demon being a bit goofy, and lovable. You did a superb job of developing both characters, then letting them grow and change as the story progressed. So many writers don't get it, that a character has to change thorugh a story for them to come alive on the page.
Well done. I'll have to see what else catches my attention. Your pen name is unusual, but also familiar. I likely have read some of your other work and just don't recall it, right now. I've been cavorting through these archives since shortly after the site launched, and have literally read thousands of submissions.
In the early years, pre IPads and tablets, I printed the stories because I couldn't sit and read at a monitor. I print both sidss of the page, in a tiny font, 8 point, I think, and make a table of contents for a cover. I re-read through them, as I was assembling others. It was something I could do, while I was working on computers, and network stuff.
I ran across some of them, that were under a shelf, I'd forgotten about. It made me realize just how long I've been reading exclusively Lit stories, and how many hundreds of them I'd read before I got the iPad. There was always about 2-3 feet of printed pages in several shelves.
Thanks for sharing your imagination, and talent, and thanks for all the work it takes to put together a submission.
GeoD
Genuinely one of the sweetest and most adorable stories I've ever read. Both characters were so deeply interesting and felt so very human, even the demonic succubus. And as long as this story was, for this website at least, I find myself wanting more. Superb work.
Stories like this make me love creative people even more. Five stars, and I'd give it 10 if I could.
This was really nice. I usually don’t comment because my addiction to this site is a source of embarrassment for me but this story was too good for me not to comment on.
Hey Xarth. Really enjoyed this one. You have this way of telling these, relatively, long story stories, on an erotica website I might add, that are maybe 10% fucking and 90% really, really good story. And this one in particular, nearly every word just dropped with sexy. Funny thing is. I don't go for F/F generally. I love Futa, but that was a brief encounter. Worked for me! And the prego alt end? Again, not my thing. IRL that possibility of getting her pregnant has always been the one anxiety during sex that doesn't go away. I prefer my fantasies to be free of stress. But not this! It was perfect, and gave the tale that last bit of (fanfare music rising just prior to credits ..) "THE END"
Thanks for the hard.
Zeke
I'm a sucker for fluffy, cute stories like this. Angela is a very relatable protagonist, coming from an overworked waitress with the most interesting thing in her fridge being a water bottle. Having a cuddler like Lilith around would be so perfect, even without sex; she's just written exactly how I've been longing for someone to be with. <3
I wish there was a show like this it was freaking awesome. Kind of like "dead like me". Simply wish there was more.
The descriptions of physical intimacy make it for me. I'm a very physical person and stuff like touches are how I express my feelings - the cute and fluffy descriptions of stuff like cuddling made me very happy. Loved the whole magical realism aspect of the story too. Overall, a great read.
YES DUDE. LETS FUCKING GO. MORE CUTE SHIT. GIVE ME IT ALL. ALL THE CUTE SHIT. SAPPY COMMENTS? YES. CUDDLING? ABSOLUTELY. LITEROTICA NEEDS MORE CUTE SHIT!!!!
Okay so like.... I have no real way to express how much I love this story, Its almost to the point that I want to scream out that its perfect. The fact that there is plenty of story to it that isn't just sex makes you feel more connected with the characters and thus makes the sex parts of the story all that much more powerful. I really wish that a lot more porn stories did this at least to some extent. It will be a very very sad day when you stop writing author and I very much hope to see more interspecies stories from you too.~
This hit a lot of nails on their heads for me. Thanks for sharing something so... compelling :)
Wonderful, an unlikely love story that made me so happy to read. Thank you.
This needs a sequel so much! Pick either ending I dont care. Please continue this story. Have Angela try out to please Lilith as well! Have them meet other supernaturals. This is one of the best stories in this site.
Hello there author. I've sent you a message but I'll write it here as well. Someone has taken your story and has adapted it to wattpad into jenlisa version with the title: "Devil's Kiss" by the user: TopJennieEnthusiast.
I don't know if she has your permission, but I felt like I should inform you!
Please write a sequel! So many things for the lovely couple to try out! You never had Angela trying to pleasure Lilith for real. Or a scene where they shower/bath together. Or go to the beach. Or have Angela try Lilith essence straight from the source so to speak! This is the hottest story I have ever read with FF, please continue it!
What an awesome story with a totally unexpected ending. A great read that I am sure I will be coming back to many times. Thanks.
I was waiting for the twist expecting Angela to be consumed or turned into a succubus or something and you threw in that ending. Loved it all ghe way through.
I come back and read this 6-12 months. The build up is so good. It’s cute! It’s funny! I love everything about this story.
How did I not see this gem for so long? Best story of ff nonhuman I read. Please make a sequel. Angela has yet to try and pleasure Lilith, and the way they interact is so cute and hot on all the cuddling and Angelas reactions. Please give us a sequel!
I made an account just to say, this is an amazing story. Though you didn't need me to tell you that!
I feel inspired to write my own demon domestic bliss now!
The throwaway lines and humour in this just takes it to another level, probably the most fun Futa/demon story I’ve read tbh. 5⭐️ Thanks for writing and posting, cheers Ppfzz.
I read this story for the first time and absolutely loved it. And then it took me that long to find it again as I couldn't remember the title. I really enjoy the slow burn romance between the two
Delicious. Lovely concept, beautifully executed.
Excellent dialogue, perfect pace - even the unsexy bits are sexy.
(Bodies are taut, though, not taught, at least in this context).
5* thanks for sharing.
Dixon (UK)
Perfect, just perfect. I couldn't have even imagined the futa sex scene like that, that was amazingly phrased and depicted. And the slow progression was to DIE for, it was lovely. Honestly I wish I could have this, but forever. I was super pleased with the story's length, but of course I would always want more of this lovely writing. And the humor and dry, witty banter - omg, it is SO good. Wow. wow wow. A+!
Back to read it again! Still as great as ever. Please write a sequel! So many unexplored kinks and so much wholesomeness to be read!
Back here again! Best futa x female story I know! Still hope desperately for a sequel.
Like others have said, this story is wonderful. The pacing, comedy, imagery, and content are all 5 star worthy. Thanks for writing this
Very sweet, thank you! And the dialogue is very well-written and as realistic as things would be around a demon - it's one of my favourite parts of this story. It's very different to see a succubus who simply LIKES someone and just hangs around for that. I wish I had someone like that...
Lilith's hands ran across her taught body. TAUGHT is to Teach. "Taut" is the word you are looking for