by DG Hear
Man I really like your work! Keep writin'em and I'll keep readin'em.
Nice story about a High School sweetheart and her lover that get back together after nine years. I did wonder about one part of the dialog though. He admits to having sex over the nine years they were apart and she only responds that she dated a lot of men and was serious about two of them. So why doesn't she just be honest and say she had sex with all of her many dates, or she only had sex with the two serious guys. Why does the woman get away with using code words when he has to be more honest about not being celibate while they were apart? Seems like a double standard and I wonder why you wrote it that way?
"We would help build new roads from Kuwait to Afghanistan" That would be one hell of a road, since it would have to pass through Iran to connect the two. I don't think Iran would approve.
Good story though, just couldn't resist the geography error.
Neil having sex with 6 of his friends wives ruined this for me. Even though 2 of them didn't mind, the fact he did it behind the back of the other four makes him an asshole. I want to see the next chapter where she cheats on him with the 6 friends, lets see if he minds it.
Yes he came over as a major asshole in the beginning and then like a lovesick teenager at the end. But, I read it in pieces which made the changes more obvious, and I found my self giving the story priority over the book on my Kindle, and the hard copy story I was reading at the same time, which means that DG continues to be a really fine storyteller...
It was, otherwise, a first class story. Five Stars amigo!
It does seem to be becoming a sort of theme - guys get to vent by fucking around without care about impact or consequences to others - but they still want the women to prove they are different and can be trusted - when they were not trustworthy for years???
OK rant over - the story was another good one with people who were mostly good - the cop was an ass and abused his power to protect his daughter - admirable but he was still an ass LOL
very good. thank you.
I too have the same concern: when I go to a party most of the women present tell my date that I am the best lover they have ever known. better than their current husbands or boyfriends.
Believe me, it's not easy. it's a bit uncomfortable bordering on embarrassing.
But hey, I support it.😎🤣
What an asshole Neil was, having sex with his friends wives. I hope that Tracy cheats on him.