All Comments on 'Knox County Ch. 01'

very good outline, but I think there should be a better intro to the 4th page. also on page 4 there some dropped words and a couple of grammatical errors.

the story is excellently built, you have us trying to guess where you are going which I think is great in every story. Sort of a mystery inside a love hate relationships....looking for more, let me know when they are comming.

dave

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You have gotten my interest and I would like you to keep on. Very different characters but you want to follow all of them. My favorite is Sean so far. Wondering where you are going to go with him. Good first try.

You have my interest. Looking forward to the next installment. Please let me know when it's posted. I will leave my e-mail on a private post. Hope it's soon.

I really liked this and I am anxiously waiting for future installments. Please don't make us wait too long!

Rehnquist, it's time to give up your day job. You are an incredibly intriguing writer, and should devote yourself to it full time. I loved your first story. This story has me totally looking forward to where you are going with it. Please let me know when the next installment arrives. Sincerely, your lawyer e-buddy (I can see a younger version of myself in Will), AverageBear

Excellent writing!! Love the story and can't wait to read more.

It would be unfair for me to rate your story because I didn't read it beyond a few random paragraphs, none of those grabbed me though. The category "Novelas, etc" on Literotica is unfortunate that it just says "Long story" but it fails to tell me about what. Maybe a town with Stepford-like wives, maybe one with a deep dark secret where the patriarch is in fact the father of all the children, maybe one where we have forced feminization of someone, maybe one which concentrates on "mature" sex,... Some of those things (and many others) would cause me to dismiss the story immediately and others to wade through pages of junk in the hopes of something interesting. So if you want me (and others similarly inclined) to read it please put in an introductory paragraph which describes what the story's about.

Pair of aces for the erotic scenes!

Youv'e some great fans & now I'm one too.... yeah a 5.

thanks for sharing on Lit.

x

I read about three-fourths of this Chapter and encountered 11 characters. Two had connects to two others. The rest were so far just random players. I suspect they will all be tied together in some fashion, but how do I keep them sorted out in the meantime? Because a story is HUGE does not mean it must have dozens of characters, introduced at random.

Sorry, but I don't have the patience to stick around until the plot sorts itself out. Well written, so far, but that is not enough to capture my attention for the long haul. I've read many novels and novellas, but they all roped me in early on. This, so far, doesn't even show promise.

So long....

very good............

I loved the story between Elizabeth and Will - I could read a whole series just about the two of them. Very well worded.

Great story beginning, with enough complexity to herald a longer story with multiple chapters. When you write, you go for broke, and I admire that. No holding back, but at the same time, perfectly paced. Great dialogue, excellent intrigue. Yeah, my top vote for sure.

Fast becoming a favorite writer for me. Hope you have time to add more and more stories.

I hope I can keep track of all the characters. Will and Elizabeth are my favorites so far.

I don't see anything to improve on. You have set up your characters well. I personally love the way good authors take their time with many characters.

You have already used the first storyline with the first wife cheating and rationalizing her actions because of the overworking husband neglecting her.

Well done.

O'Henry couldn't have ended it better; a delight.

Love the start of the story. Got me hooked for sure. Excellent writing and character development. Excited to read more.

Now if course I want to see where these last 2 end up - and maybe the other chars too -

Wow! That was the longest, hottest sex scene on this site. I am enjoying this immensely.

I would like for these two get together. I have known quite a few "pros" in my time, most of them just as friends. There have been some fine ones in my acquaintence. This all happened back in the sixties. Some of them made good wives for several male friends. It would be qute romantic for these two to have a romance and I hope to see it in the next chapters.

Wow! Great intro, you've definitely grabbed my interest and made me want to read more. Forcing myself to stop and give feedback before rushing to the next chapter. Want to read more about what's next for these characters.

Fantastic writing, storyline grabs the reader, character development is perfect, just enough to tease the reader into wanting more. Thank you for sharing!

Too many characters and too much jumping around. It reads like a TV miniseries with a cast of dozens. I would prefer it broken down into desperate stories for each thread. Makes it easier to follow for us old geezers with our short attention spans.

The writing is excellent. I'm sure my problems with the story are the result of my own issues, not your storytelling.

I've been reading here for months now (6+), a lot of stories get me VERY turned on, now and then (very rarely) one makes me cum. This is the first ever to give me multiples! Will and Elizabeth better get together, & can we clone him? PLEASE?! Definitely 5 Star writing!

Why do I get the feeling that the attorney is either you or who you wished you were. We'll see if she allows herself to be with him again. As for the cheating pieces of shit, may they be immediately miserable and die a horrible death.

Give it time.

This is obviously a long story, and the author is introducing many of the characters we will be following.

Over time it should all make sense, if Rehnquist is up to his usual standards!

These two HAVE to end up together!

You can't have them start off so HOT, and SO in tune with each other, to not have them betogether.

I'm sad to see you haven't posted in years, but I'll take a chance that you read reviews to say this was simply fantastic.

Excellent variety, well detailed characters, hot smut, and you end it with a cliffie - simply brilliant!

Thanks!

Congrats. A great start with lots of interesting seeds planted. Five out of five. I won't say too much more because there are lots of chapters to come. But I will say the sex was hot, the characters are well drawn so far, the writing is sound and it will be interesting to see a long story with lots of characters and whether you can weave them all together.

Cheers, Steve

Truly erotic.

A master storyteller. Still love it. Still five stars.

And it is even better than the first two. The final scene with Will and Elizabeth is just incredibly well done in such a loving manner, the way two people express themselves when they are in love. Thank you.

I have no good reason for not reading this story before. Shame on me. This has laid a foundational base that can go in so many ways. I am eager to continue. Let's see how they intertwine as the story develops.

I will definitely read my way through the rest of this terrific story.

So sorry that you're not still active here! Maybe you'll surprise all of your fans here someday! ;-)

Looking forward to reading through it all again. So well written; truly excellent. You're easily one of the top, if not THE top, writer on this site or any other story-posting site I've seen. It's our loss that you no longer submit your stories here. Hopefully you're selling them now, as you could easily make a living doing this - I only wish I knew where and what name you're using.

I hope time has been kind to you and you're well. Thanks for posting. 5 stars, of course.

This is several levels better than anything you've written, so far. The dialogue, is really

good. The sex is hotter, more complex, 3x as erotic as anything I've read by you. Truly superb!!!!

I'm eager to see where it all goes.

Bravo!!

You devoted essentially an entire chapter to their intensely loving and erotic night, only to blow it up in the last paragraph. Unless you change your mind and bring them together again, it’s just a throwaway chapter..

There seemed to be too many character introductions. Is this a romance, or LW story? I was not sure who to pay attention to.

But it's better than I remember. I see comments about it being so frenetic. What they don't realize is these characters will all be dealt with. And the set up of Elizabeth and Will is one of the best in Lit. Thanks again for posting such an awesome story. Will is by far my favorite and sympathetic character in the Knox County Series

Sensuous, what love making should be. Problem is they don't give lessons. Born in the 40s and learning about sex in 60s is sort of an OJT thing. Not much opportunity. Pretty good writing R.

You've written yourself into a corner with this one - no? A magic connection and she pulls the plug, what's he gonna do ....... Love the love-making action - if that is what it is, I've never been thru action like that! Look forward to your digging your characters out of the hole you've put them in.

Well, we get introduced to some future major characters, thanks. Will and Elizabeth seem like 2 pages of gratuitous sex with no real tie in with the bad cop, why?

Yes, I agree. Some special characters created here. Will and Elizabeth at the top of the class.

Fucking brilliant!!!!!

This has so many possibilities.

Cannot figure why l postponed reading this so long ago. Put it off for so long.

Now, lm just amazed. First timer for this tale, scores 5/5

Tremendously erotic! One of the best I’ve read on LE. Five stars ⭐️ for this one.

This is beginning to turn out to be a very, very interesting tale 5 stars