by Ashson
What on earth happened to the rest of the story? it was just warming up nicely?
... no more! What a disappointing non-end to what was shaping up so well. Do bring us the proper ending and I'll make four stars into five!
Midway through Brian became Tim?? I agree that this could easily have continued into the upcoming blossoming of Clarissa's sex life and perhaps a righteous involvement by Marie~~ Overall, short and sweet!!
This had the potential to be one of your best works yet and you ended it waaay too early. This screams for a continuation.
Either do a page 2 or 3 or quit writing these stories. You've got a lot of quantity stores...now pick up your quality.