by WFEATHER
Great story telling! Great attention to details. Very independent in the selection of scenes (I won't tell so that you will find on your own).
One critical comment: one of the great pleasures in life and in stories is the seduction process of the first time (it does not matter if both sides seduce each other or not). I think that its best to not foreshadow to later stages of the relations while you are at the stage of the story. You broke the spell a bit with it. Other than that a great read!
This was highly erotic story that made me moist and fidgety ... Thank you Sir!