by columfa
Take your time to develop the story.
Looking forward to Chpt 2
A very nice slow start. The author is taking time to develope characters and a plot which will make the story all the more enjoyable. Looking forward to Ch. 2.
This was a good beginning to this story. Exciting, good pacing, erotic. I wouldn't normally give it 100, mainly due to the brevity, but I'll give it a bit of extra "oomph" simply to help balance out the "0" given by the last poster. Incredibly amusing when someone posts anonymously, obviously writing nothing of their own, yet feeling free to bash another's writing for no reason and tell someone who to write.
THAT is a true "loser".
Keep up the good work, I'm looking forward to reading more to this story.
Good start. I don't understand the comment from "Anonymous in The South", it seems to me that he is the "LOSER". If he only wants to read one installment stories, why is he reading one clearly labeled "Ch.01"? None of the rest of his comment makes any sense either, so just ignore him.
this is not all of the story is it? there must be more to it.
If you've read columfa's "Cabin Fever" then any nonsence about the usual crap is just that ...CRAP. The author can write...period. This is another great one from him. An excellent start.
This wasn't the first story I have read of yours. Just as hot as the others. Please write more.The characters and sex are believable, the writing excellent. More!
I first read this story late last night...I whacked off knowing my sexy mom was right down the hall.....