All Comments on 'Learning to Please Ch. 02'

the wet dreams of a horny 13 year old boy.

Ah, to be 13 again!

Don't know how I feel about this. Does she come to know herself as a submissive or just for Richard? Where is this story going, it just seems to peter out.

Liked the story not exactly sure why. Will have to read it again. It's a little confusing as I'm not sure what Deedee is? A sub, confused, abused!!??

As well done as the first chapter is, this one is rather flat. He shows her favor, and then ignores her. He tells her to consider his birthday present, but doesn't let her know he expects another woman. He asks if she has a present for him, and then promptly shows that he wants Sandra. He does not indicate that Sandra should be informed as to what will go on, but punishes her for not doing so. After all, when she attended the first party at New Year's she had no clue what she was in for. He humiliates her in front of a patently more beautiful woman, and treated her as DeeDee's equal though she is a new visitor. There is no excitement here, it even starts off depressing with Deedee being ignored. Then it proceeds to confusion and an ending that dribbles off into only more questions with no indications as to where this is going. Is she part of an 'inner circle' now, part of an accepted group of preferred and talented women? Or is she just there to be used and abused? Will Deedee simply be cast aside in favor of his new 'present' or is Sandra just there for Dr. Edward's birthday pleasure? There is nothing here even vaguely erotic. I'll give this a three because I like your other work, but I'll have to also give this a 'Thumbs Down' for content on it's own. You have the process of being admitted into 'the life' done well. You clearly have no idea what a Master is or how a Sub is to be treated or how to live the life.

First chapter had potential. Her blind acceptance of everything, especially when it involves co-workers, was a stretch for me. The character development was thin, but it had possibilities.

This chapter crashed. Nothing erotic here. He's an ass, not a dom. The situation was uncomfortable and not in any sexy way. I could only wonder why she went along with it all. The action was too much a listing of directions, like bad community theater rehearsals. Do this ! Do that! Now do that other! And curtain.

I completely agree with 'Strange'. This is a completely confusing, disconnected, and depressing narrative. Chapter 01 was filled with her attraction to him, her participation at the party, passing the test by pleasuring several men, The sensual bathing and the favor Richard showed her in the 'Chamber'. This installment just looked like he had Made Use of Deedee and her compliance with him and attraction to him to get her to bring to his party an obviously more attractive and just as compliant as well as besotted coworker. Just as 'Strange' stated, he is not a true Master as he has no idea about how to see to those who choose to serve him. He is not even a decent human being. You have written a main character who is unfortunate enough to fall for a power drunk ass who seems to enjoy humiliating and abusing women. This was not rape, it was consentual so I won't give it a 'one star'. I give it a two because I really do not like anything about it. This is called litEROTICA for a reason and there is nothing - repeat nothing - erotic about this chapter 02.