by Mused
This is sooooo good. keep it coming. It's just as good as your last story and that's saying something.
This is seriously awesome. Looking forward to the next part with bated breath.
A creative plot combined with superb writing makes this story extremely sexy. Your talent for writing description makes everything more vivid. I look forward to the next chapters.
Very good on keeping us hanging, maybe Liza should expierence some male
Whoa. This just keeps getting better and better. I love the way you've drawn it out, it'll make the eventual union all the more tantalising. Damn you for leaving us all on the edge. Damn you! :-p
What happened to mess this guy up so much?
It's very well done though. Interesting twists.
Just as I thought. Another marvelous chapter and a cliffy to boot. You have such a way with words. I absolutely love it. I'm not sure which of your stories is my favorite now. Keep it up, it's amazing.
oh i'm not really into 3some, so i'm glad about the ending coz i just want him for her :D
Very nice pacing! Giving your characters the perfect motivations! Brother /sister resentment, drunken teenage party, then the cliffhanger...PERFECT
i realy love this story its like hucking me to read more at every ending u are a true writer
The worst character in this story is really Liza. Taking advantage of Dawn when she is at her most vulnerable. She's really a rapist, nothing less then that. Guess she would make a good team with Jason there....
This is not how I expected the second chapter to go, but I enjoyed it all the same. I don't think I found one thing to fault about this. Great job!
So Liza and Jeff are PREDATORS willing to act as saviors but instead "take advantage of and RAPE his lovely sister"; F-U-C-K EM BOTH, they both deserve what she Liza was wishing upon Jason the drug pushing Rapist. At this point we know that Jeff is a self-centered, egotistical pig; he was saved but still want act upon his lust, Grrrrrrrr
I swear to god; if either of those two take advantage of her - I will never read another one of your stories. You don't abuse the good ones !!!!!
DKP
This story is so different, Jeff literally is a absolute fuck tard who doesnt give a shit about his sister, until it comes to basically raping her while drunk. Dawn is roofied, drunk and barely conscious and Liza is taking advantage, poor girl. I wouls have driven her home if i was there.
Is every character from Liza, Jason And Jeff all set on raping dawn!?
I'm conflicted with this story...so far.
first she kinda "hates" her brother, then she was "willingly" let him fuck her?
okay probably on roofies and drunk but still..?
uhm..dont know if thats considered rape already, but its painstakingly close to it. dawn said stop and yet still...
conflicting things and confusing at times.
yet I still like the story so far...not for the topic of rape and all but so far how its written (style) and a potential to be good with the storylines which can develop.
Narcissistic egotistical piece of shit Jeff doesn't deserve Dawn. Poor Dawn is caught in a web of evil and there's no one to rescue her. 😢 I'm not enjoying this one at all. One more chapter to give it a chance of redemption. But I'm not counting on it.
(4/1/2022) Well now, this was unexpected. Very well done. Hot and dramatic. Don't know if I should love or hate Liza; I'm torn. Five stars.