All Comments on 'Lilac's 18yo Friend: Payton's Gift'

You're not that good; if she liked it that much, it was mostly her. If your dick has liquids pooling on it, see a doctor.

The actual sexual content and premise of this story was great and I really enjoyed it. The only thing that let this story down was the horrible personal narrative and general tone of misogyny throughout. If you keep your stream of consciousness out of your writing and focus on the plot you could be a much better writer.

I figured the misogyny was a deliberate satire. I mean, the ending pretty clearly makes the girl out to be in the right. He's the one with delusions, and she's the one with class. So I thought the author was deliberately making the protagonist unlikeable and kind of obtuse as satire.

This is by far the best of Lilac's Friends. Excellent use of erotic detailing.