All Comments on 'Lines on Her Face'

I regret to inform you that your story will not be eligible for prizes in the A.I.R. Summer Luvin Contest which is running concurrently with the LITEROTICA contest of the same name due to various rules infractions.

Gabrielle L.

President, A.I.R.

I love the pictures you paint in my mind BUT they are smeared with silly little grammar mistakes

Please keep writing however ..it is so refreshing to read tales by a male who doesn't feel a need to make this very average male feel under endowed.

Yes, life is short so keep on writing .

Great use of adjective to create imagery.

Poor use of tense, passive voice and grammar detract from an otherwise interesting story.

After the contest, perhaps you can re-write, extend and come up with something good from this beginning.