All Comments on 'Lisa's Divorce Party'

Did the writer read this story before posting it? They should have.

Grammar, vocabulary, and sentence structure are all pretty good. That's why I suspect all the mistakes are mostly typos. This can really kill a story because the reader has to stop and try and figure out what the author intended. Most are easy but it still interrupts the tempo of the story. When writting an intimate sex scenario, tempo is very critical. Just like in real life. It has to flow towards the climax. Typos in a written sex scenario is like your phone ringing every five minutes while making love. Not very satisfying and rarely a climax. So, take a few minutes and turn off your phone. A lot of typos won't be caught by a spell checker since most form words like "or" instead of "our" or "5 bother girlfriends" which I'm sure the tip of your thumb caught the "b" key when hitting the space bar. Those are the ones that really cause tempo interruptus. Good imagination and a smooth flow is very important in relationships whether they are writer and reader or two lovers. Thank you

For your own divorce party when your so realizes the selfish awful kind of person you are deep down and dumps you.

Remember to ask for Heath coverage in the settlement, you'll need it for the STD treatments.

Somethings should just remain the musings of people and not go beyiond that.

a proofreader and a psychiatrist.

posting stories, you are not human, you are not loveable, cheating is part of your DNA your parents are shunned, married and bi is adultery, your husband should be taken out back like old a lame dog.

you cant get married in a church and be bi and say god loves you, because you fuck other people in your marriage, no fidelity no marriage, just hanging out till you die. and any kids are doomed....no moral center in there life. sex is not just sex, dont marry dont claim to love, you dont do it well, you fuck,fuck fuck thats all you do, dont marry dont claim to be a loving wife to a good guy who is pussy whipped, you are going to divorce him anyway, loyalty is not possible with your mindset..defective.

yes ive know bi's it always ends the same their other half is always destroyed and the bi just goes fucking over other men.

your story shows this, this is your fantasy, this is all your kind can be...defective.

0 star - poor story and not one character worried about STDs - not even the stupid wife.