All Comments on 'Little Emily'

The first sentence was a forewarning. I think you meant "throw" and not through. As I skimmed "through" the story I noticed it was one silly cliche after another causing me to pull the plug quickly and waste no more time.

When she comes home in 2 years Emily should introduce brian to the son the gave her the night they

fucked.

A fun, quick read.

Too many syntax errors. Get someone to proofread for you. (Word choices are occasionally a problem, too. Yep, that first "through" is a warning of perils ahead.)

****Sweet and HOT. Thanks for sharing.

ever notice those who sign on as anonymous often point out what they see as flaws and say get a proofreader. This pisses me off.

I know proofreaders are hard to come by.

Here is a technique used by professional proofreaders (yes, they still exist

Read your material backwards, It will allow you to catch many errors both in writing and meaning.

Ignore the backbiters - they don't have the ability or courage to put their work out for others