by shiprat
You write well, and arousingly. My only wee niggle is that you don't use abbreviations in reported speech. For example 'I have not' would be normally spoken as 'I haven't'. Just keeps the dialogue more immediate.
Like you, English is my second language. I'm Scots, and don't try and hide it in my writing.
You earned a five from me.
Lovely story and lovely writing. It really got me excited. Do write the next part soon.
Do you have an email id I can reach?
Thought you had given up. Glad your back. The story was well written and hope to see more soon.
Really great story. Nice plot development and very well written. Keep it up! Can't wait to read more. :)
enjoyable story, and well written. Would love to see you expand with more detail during the sex scene. Nice to see more indian writers :-)
Wow, i loved this story, it actually had so much more than just meaningless sex.. i love the build up and the actual story as well.. Keep writing, thank you for this..
wow great story. i like that.
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I know you wrote this story on 2011,but I recently found it and read it. I give you 5 star,if there is a option then I will give you thousands star for this story.. I beg you to write the third part of this story..please please please...please write the 3rd part...please
I also agree with roguelife6,there's not near enough Indian writers on here,especially female ones at that,so glad to have found you lol,and I added you to my favorites list as well.....Thank you!