All Comments on 'Lost Empire Ch. 05'

I truly am enjoying this story and look forward

to reading the entire tale.

Very refreshing to read your style of writing.

Love the way characters are developing

And the story keeps evolving.

Perhaps a sci- if novel is in your future

( if perhaps you have not already written one)

Thank you for this story, I am anxiously awaiting

your next chapter

my 4th coment on this story so far.... and i cant wait to read more....

talented artistes are hard to find.

Well written...suspenseful...great at drawing one in...MORE PLEASE!

Oh my! What''s next. Can't wait to read more.

And really fun to read

By the way I looked up old wise tale vs old wives' tale... the second is correct not the first. I have read the first 15 chapters today and am now on my second reading! MarcD

Really enjoying this story!

But, noticed that the invading force will 'breach the galaxy in 9 days, 36 hours...' etc, implying that a 'day' in this story must exceed 36 hours. Just wondering...

An excellent story so far...

Note that the past tense of drag is dragged, not drug!

Lots of interesting ideas and possibilities.

Had to reread several sentences over and over to understand the intent. Story needs an editor, or few, to reach a higher level. Perhaps I should look in the mirror .... uh-uh

Sky is the limit (or maybe not).

Quite a fun read so far, but agree with the other comment. Editing needed badly as there are grammar and language misuses that detract. But still a really cool concept and fun to read.

So many inconsistencies through this, plus so much tech jabber, more plot and less jabber needed, then an editor to pare away the extra. Although this is so old now, any comments make no difference at all.