All Comments on 'Love Is All You Need Pt. 01'

I like it...a few errors in spelling and such, but I don't find that to be a point that needs critique negatively like so many do here. It's simply a matter of having an editor go over your work. I'll keep my eyes open for the next installment..

...and a little hard to read. It needs a second pair of eyes to look it over. BUT, nice character development, practical, logical, easy to follow storyline, and it's basically written well, just... as stated... rough. Still gave it 5 *. <sigh> it is one beautiful story though :) Hope you can find some help with it. Cheers! --- Josie

I concur with Joscelyn, lovely story, interesting characters, but the typos pulled me out of the flow of the story. A second pair of eyes would really help. There is a list of available editors for you to choose from and I encourage you to do so...besides they offer their services for free! Believe me when I say that in the world of fiction writing, getting someone to look at your work and edit it pro-bono is fantastic.

Beyond that a great start, looking forward to reading more.

just awesome looking for the next episode ...

great tempo...looking forward to the next chapter

Can't wait for the next chapter.

I agree with the others, your story is very captivating and imaginative. The character work and interplay is very well done. Your descriptive work is also very well done. I really enjoyed your story, and hope to see you follow the advice by earlier commenters and get some help. It is amazing what another pair of eyes can see that the writer will miss. Simple spelling and grammatical errors can really throw off a smooth read. Fantastic start though and I really look forward to following this beautifully budding love story.

thank you

cliptoe

This is how TS-stories should be. Romantic and not forceful

I do hope she tops him in the next chapter.

Very Romantic. Such a beautiful fantasy. I wish I were her

Xxxxx

Cindy

One of the best stories I ever read.

Can't wait for Chapter 2.

Maybe he can prove his love by giving her his virgin ass ...

Amazing story - I can't wait for the next chapter

One of the best stories I have read on here

Get a good editor. Your story is good but some of the words are inappropriate, as if you are using auto-correct on a phone. Characters are well developed. Story moves well. Fix the little things.

I cum’d when he sucked her penis. Great story.