by yukonnights
I loved this! It was beautifully written, and I could really feel the love and passion between them. Well done!
I think my enjoyment of it was somewhat stalted by a couple of things...
1) Your constant conflation of the physical act of sex between a male and a female and subjugation. Or the very idea that somehow the act of penetration is subjugating. I mean perhaps as a man you, or your character, find the act to be subjugating. That's fine. But I think the continued linking of the feelings of Stefan to that of how a woman might feel are distracting...and not to be harsh...a bit shallow. The biggest problem with Stefan is that he sees all sexual power as being phallically driven. I think he needs to continue to explore the true power of his overall sexuality...the most satisfied souls do.
2) I don't understand the constant refrences to husbandry. Move beyond this. Think bigger.
3) If your desire is to express the ability of one man to truely love another than why do you constantly bring up male and female dichotomies. Why not force yourself to explore sexuality and partnerships that exist beyond this very limited understanding. I mean, for practical purposes, I think it would be easier for the reader to see these two male souls if you weren't contstantly re-entreching the very same structure you are hoping to subvert.
Not bad...I just think there was more potential...
Di
This was a very nice, interesting read🌹. As far as mechanics: nice💋I have a shoebox of love letters/material for “BFF” I’d like to use, too, beyond my diary.
Wonderfully written description of the magical moment when a D/s relationship goes to the next level. As a submissive in search of the One who will make me truly his, I read Martin’s words as my own. One day, perhaps...