All Comments on 'Love Potion'

by randibyrnes

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tastethejuicetastethejuiceover 12 years ago
Well Done

Love the story but most of all I love the last line, don't be long before you give us another story. Thank You.

YgraineYgraineover 12 years ago
Lovely story

Beautifully written. Thank you for sharing it.

WerewolfEnthusiastWerewolfEnthusiastover 12 years ago
ohhh shit ... hahaha

i hope theres a second part to this cause it was bloody brilliant.

Mostera1Mostera1over 12 years ago
Smiling

That was a super nice elevator ride!

Thank you!

M1

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
This is a classic!

What a clever tale you have spun for us. I hope more readers take the opportunity to read it, because it's wonderful.

Scotsman69Scotsman69over 12 years ago
I'm in fits of giggles

Just lovely. Thank you.

bejeweledcatbejeweledcatover 12 years ago
Perfect for Valentines Day

I loved it! Great story, nice twist, nice use of a $5 word (ephemeral) and just generally bloody brilliant - to quote Werewolf Enthusiast!

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
You know,,,

I think my favorite moment was, it's my mother Gisela

ambush184ambush184over 12 years ago
nice

Didn't see that endinxdg coming. Well written story. Just long enough. I hope others feel the same. Thanks for sharing.

EesomeBeastieEesomeBeastieover 12 years ago

Actually I found the ending rather a let down. Clever, yes, but I felt annoyed at the psychic for abusing trust like that, and that annoyance wiped out the nice fuzzy feeling the rest of story had created. 4 stars.

F_WhateverF_Whateverover 12 years ago

Sweet little story! It made me smile and think... life's good.

Thank you for writing.

MaddieKimMaddieKimover 12 years ago
It's my mother.

Oh my, what a cute story. Loved the last line. Thanks for sharing. Good luck with the contest.

Maddie

Percheron69Percheron69over 12 years ago
Great story.

A very nice cute story. Just don't be afraid to expand on your characters and dialogue. :)

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
Well done

And very nice twist at the end.

:-)

Dan

dan69izzy@yahoo.com

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
Ha

Ha, Ha, Ha! Got me!

Funguy1102Funguy1102over 11 years ago
Enjoyable & witty

An easy read, left me with a renewed appreciation for romance.

Thanks

SampkyangSampkyangabout 8 years ago
Very nice fairy tale

The guy however was very fast and NOT the least bit shy. The girl wasn't looking for love she just wanted to be fucked. well written and fun...

Willsgirl01Willsgirl01almost 3 years ago

Loved this story! It had a perfect little twist at the end, too! It was sooo good!

rbloch66rbloch66over 1 year ago

Really cheesy, but very entertaining. 5 stars

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Thank you for the comments, hope to submit more often in the coming months. Sorry, I don't send out pictures. Thanks for reading and voting. Randi