All Comments on 'Lowborn Ch. 03'

hey, just wanted to say i always enjoyed your stories and i re-read them from time to time.

its good to see you back again, and with your usual high standard of story-telling.

Pompeil LOL If they get hungry, they can always catch some dinner with his pocket fisherman. Getting a kick out of this story and can't wait for the next part.

Thanks for the comment, and it's good to be back! Here's hoping I can keep the momentum rolling for a while this time :)

Yep, Pomp was named that on purpose *laugh* I got a kick out of it. There's another character that may provoke that same reaction later on ;)

Love, love, love your writing!! I'm so glad you're showing us the back-stories. I like seeing where the characters came from, and what makes them what they become. Keep up the fantastic work!! :D

I have to agree with some of the previous comments -- you are really outdoing yourself with this series, O'Dark1 :) Seriously, this is really good. Lynn

As a reader I would greatly appreciate some dialogs with suggestive comments from prostitutes in the lake. Also, while traveling, some conversations are bound to be started. At least, to ease the mind from the slavers incident.

In my opinion, not enough dialogs are given to describe an overall emotional state of most participants in each scene. I like the quick pace of the story, but it seems too shallow. Some lingering and downtime for getting to know the characters better is what missing for deeper emotional investment.

Otherwise, the story is interesting and entertaining.

Thanks for sharing the inspiration.