All Comments on 'Lunches'

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My friend, this is a treasure! Please keep it up.

Thanks for sharing a great story.

I liked that it was a story that just happened to have sex in it. Too many submissions are just sex with a tiny bit of a story.

I kind of expected Alan to attack Bailey and Carter beat his little punk ass. I'm glad that didn't happen.

absolutely amazing story of love, in all of it's forms. It would be kind of interesting to find out what did happen to Emily.

Wonderfully touching.

What if most people acted as these two, what a wonderful world we would have had!

Please keep writing but avail yourself of the volunteer editors. The story was good enough to make me suffer through the grammar and missing words.

There was nothing wrong with the dialog. Obviously, OLDBOB68 doesn't realize there really are people who speak that way. I've met and worked with some of them. Five and faved.

But ending was confusing. Needed more story between him not actually asking her to marry him and whst must be the wedding. Surely mum would have met him and seen the 'church' before. How cum Emily, ex GF I assume, was at the wedding venue? Was she homeless? Best to stop writing before rushing the end and make it a second chapter when you have time and inspiration.

A refreshing story line. Development was well paced with only a few gaps that could have been explored a bit more. All in all, very nice.

I could feel the reality of the story. Well done

About a dozen will do! Well written in just about every way, big boys do cry.

You do a little epiloge of the others but why not mention Emily? And please could we have an Emily story?

What about Emily? She's there at the end but was she homeless still what?

Whenever I’m depressed or have a bad day, I read this story. The warmth, compassion, and believability lifts my spirits. Take out the sex and this would make a Hallmark movie,

Your last statement makes you sound like a hard ass. But, you are correct. An author should not need to thank a reader. Might be a little different if we were paying for the story. I like your stories, some much better than others. The ones I don't like deal with topics that I don't care for, so I don't read them even though they are written by an author that I really appreciate. This is one of the really good ones. Thanks. 5*

Second Time read, just awesome

Another excellent story. Not criticism but an observation. Transfers to another Catholic dioceses is redundant. What other dioceses would he have been moved to ? JEWISH OE BAPTIST-ISLAM. ALSO EMILY At the end was not neccessary. Gave it 5☆ since I am not an author.

Loved the lingo, loved the food (hungry now!) and loved the story, an ‘specially love way you write as ay speak. Top job JimBob44 and thank you.

There was a lot of heart in this story, thank you.

I love this warmhearted tale.