by naughtycakes
...for a lawyer to be on the receiving end of a thorough fucking-over.
This is some of the best sensual brutality I have read in quite a while. Please continue the storyline! Excellent!
Brutal, yes, but so very sensual. Your descriptions of Lydia's surroundings, the cold air, the rough texture of the concrete, the tightness of the leather collar, all build the tension and excitement. Lydia's transformation from fear to lust, from somewhat prudish (her life-long embarrassment regarding her nipples) to wanton slut was deftly handled. And the break from the conventional conclusion was excellent--very 'realistic' (in that not every situation ends on cue) and provided an opportunity for a real star-turn in obedience. Yeah, I'm interested to see what happens next. We know the prisoners' riot won't last forever, the reversal of roles will be corrected, Lydia will be returned to her position of power, the inmate to his shackles. But how will they be changed by the experience? Nice stuff. It worked for me.
wow that was fantastic! i cant wait to read the rest. keep up the brilliant work.
This isn't really my cup of tea as erotica, but in terms of the writing it is very well done. You create a tangible sense of menace at the introduction, and the descriptive writing is excellent.
A truly delicious premise with a sublime setting for exploring the wickedly perverse, for where better to find the most beastly and brutal sex than at the mercy of depraved, sex-starved criminals? The story was well written, with an engaging narrative voice, and a strong sense of description that helped bring the story to life. Powerful, with a potential to be made even more intense by embellishing and expanding, peeling back the layers and delving into the really juicy details. I can easily envision where the story could progress from here, but I'll be looking forward to seeing where you take it.
I will await the second part of this story with anticipation! Great visualization.
Wow...that was one of the best stories I've read in a long time. I also smiled at the thought this story could have been ripped from my own mind, I met my ex husband six months after he got out of prison where he served 7 and a half years and the prison riot rape was a common fantasy for both of us. Reading this made me hot and it makes me miss my ex, I think I'm gonna go give him a call.
I wasn't ready to stop reading! :)
Great job - I'm eager for the rest.
I loved it. Powerful and erotic. Looking forward to the next installment.
Hmmm, I really need more of this! As erotica it got my panties wet, as a piece of writing it had me believing it, feeling it, wanting it.......
I'm a 26 year old teacher in Canada and I think of some boys in my classes doing this same thing to me. You are a very good writer and I loved your poems. Please contact me a kellypam18@aol.com or IM me on AIM at kellypam18 so I can share my thoughts with you. Pamela
Nice start you have me hard and ready for the next installment. Please don't make me beg!
I loved your story, very well written and truly erotic. Please give us another installment!!
I can only support what everyone else already said.
Your way of describing the over all situation is really fantastic. I also love how she enjoys submitting to him without simply becoming a slut, but rather how you describe her growing lust catalyzed through his eyes and voice.
I really hope to see more of your great writing style, especially if it's a new chapter of this storyline.
fine story get us fans another chapter please
This story! Very deliciously written pervertably Kinky😋 I can't believe it's you're first one...Please continue with it....A fan