by m_storyman_x
Hope we don't have to wait too long for more of this story. It has started so well....
You usually have better grasp of the details. The maid went from almost as big as his late wife who was huge, to modest, to large oranges, to little, in just the first two pages. Had to take off a star for that. (Also Romanian became Russian, but who cares about that?)
This is the first story I have read, of yours.
I thought it was awesome! Definitely want to have this story line continue.
Your stories are always very good and interesting. Can’t wait for chapter two. 5⭐️
Good premise.
But each sexual encounter/action happens much too abruptly. Too mechanically. Too automatic.
Needed extended teasing. And extended foreplay.
Three stars.
Hot story, I hope there is more and maybe the maid is already knocked up. More please.
Excellent story, but a few continuity errors.
e.g., Romanian to Russian, to Romanian.
Great story, love the way the husband comes out of the depression of losing his wife. Can’t wait to find out about the Romanian maid.
I really hope there will be a second instalment, great characters, lots of emotions and need I say great sex. I like how you developed this to make a difficult time into a wonderful story
Story begins promisingly enough regarding Bill and Erica, with Erica arranging for Tanya, the ROMANIAN maid to clean his place. Always seemed Erica set up Tanya to fuck Bill, although it was obvious she kind of had the hots for him (to be THAT concerned) to begin with; you actually hid that pretty well until her "bikini reveal." When Erica surprised both Tanya and Bill doing the deed, I knew it shocked her because he wasn't screwing her (Erica). You timed her reveal to him appropriately, although once they coupled, the story made Erica the ONLY logical choice to "interview" Bill intimately about Amanda, yet you passed that to Doris--someone we were NEVER introduced to until when they both turn each other on. It only made sense to shorten him visiting the plant, helping find the trouble, then to have him return to Erica for the "Doris interview" instead and to remove Doris completely from the equation.
Still a pretty good story, although -1 star for introducing Doris/not having Erica interview him; -1 star for not extending him deepening contact with Erica/introducing the broken plant part instead. It really derailed the logic to not continue the "flow" with Erica. 3
Fantastic. It's unusual but I am really curious as to what happens with the maid. Hope the next chapter is as good as this one. 5 stars
Great story line, hot sex what's not to like? I think you have another winner in the works. Looks like old Bill has a harem on his "hands"! Please tell us more about these folks.
Cheers
SAGE
What a Wonderful Hot Erotic start to this story. Bill seems to have turned the corner from grieving for 2 years. He did have a special Marriage and Relationship with his wife Amanda.
This story has a potential depth to it that may turn out to be one of the author's finest- as long as it is continued. Let us hope that the author will do so before too long. Five stars.