All Comments on 'Makin' It Even Pt. 01'

Part 02 soon please!!!!!

Part 02 soon please!!!

The story definitely deserves five stars for the good writing and well-balanced dramaturgy.

It's also worth five stars just for the fact that it's a story where the protagonist actually has agency and makes things happen. That is much too rare here, so thank you for going against the trend on that.

I like the way you started out very modest and proper and as you went through each part; they both opened up more and got more bold. The final section where she is rubbing his butt, rubbing his hole, his balls and jerking his cock was so hot. Then he reciprocates and rubs her butt, both holes, her boobs and all over her body as she did to him; without fully admitting anything they did. I sure hope before the 3 days are out she makes the moves he wants; which is full hard sex and intercourse to the point of a full hard cumming. Cannot wait for the next chapter and then see what they both propose for the future !! Thank you, very enjoyable.

So many do this

For part 2 it would be nice to have them go to a public beach

PLEASE TAKE IT TO THE NEXT STEP

WE NEED FINGERS IN HER PUSSY OR MY COCK WILL EXPLODE.

Why can't they talk to each other.

Excellent story ki

I hope he gets his cock in her nice big sweet ass.

Hope they decide to share an apartment.

With she was my tan sister

"descended down" - these two words mean the same thing. It's exactly the same as writing, "She went down down the stairs." Were you going for a Status Quo kind of thing? "Down, down, deeper and down..."

I can't wait to read part 2. But I think I'll rub one out now and come back for seconds.

Just simply superb...

As any woman will tell you, suntan lotion drenched fingers have no place near her vagina. OUCH! But other than rather painful thought that it was a good teaser

I've already read part 2. How long before 3 and 4?? Really well done. Take your time but hurry up.

Great story - you built it up very well.

Readers beware. This author is a cock tease.

Great premise.

But all that touching and not a bit of overt excitement? C'mon...

Three stars.

You need an anatomy lesson. A woman would be a complete idiot to try and shave her vagina! There is no hair in a vagina!

Love the story. This is a very believable buildup and seduction between siblings. The way it happens in real life. Believe me… I know.

Looking forward to reading part 2

Nice read but what happens next?