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All Comments on 'Making Work a Better Place Ch. 04'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
Great series!

Keep them cumming!

MuskratSamMuskratSamalmost 12 years ago
proofread!

I'm loving the story, but please, please, please, proofread better or ask another author to edit it. All the typos look like you're just trying to write as fast as you think - take the time to go back and reread 3 or 4 times.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
This is so much...

... an Adam Sandler movie waiting to be made!

theanalisttheanalistover 10 years ago
you could have prolonged Sylvia's session with Joshua

it was starting to get heated up but you pulled the plug a bit too soon....

Geon54Geon54over 3 years ago
Funny stuff

A lot of very funny stuff in these chapters but I think my favorite might be:

"I can't be trusted to buy myself a birthday present I like."

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First off, I thrive on feedback; so please fire away when you get the urge. I read it all and it often brings different perspectives. The main thing making me a little unusual is that I'm bi-polar … with some serious medication on board to stay semi-normal. My other character...