All Comments on 'Making Your Own Breaks'

Im not high enough to follow this

Had promise, got stupid, became a waste of time. Shame.

Great sex scene but the rest of the story is a chaotic mess. There is no logic train whatsoever merely a series of unlinked scenes. Not enough here to really comment upon. Still the sex scene was great if truncated fun. Still haven’t a clue about the plot and there is no conclusion whatsoever.

3 stars

It was a little convoluted for my taste. The writing itself was good, not great, but good. The story though was hard to follow and not fully developed, it was like catching a movie half-way through, and trying to follow the plot. The characters weren't developed enough to make them believable, or to care about them. You've done much better in the past. But still Thanks for Sharing.

"...behind a connivance store ..."?

Is that anthing like a CONVENIENCE store?

He left the 1 person that could ruin the whole thing since she could declare the dead guy wasn't her step-dad and derail his get away. Stupid

Need to hear the rest of the story and what happens to the whore wife

I'm not high enough either.

very disjointed story

Checked out on this one when the supposed 'victim' turned out to be a cheating asshole. After that, don't really care what happened or why and can't really blame the wife for wanting him dead.

AWWWsome !!!!! As far as the plot goes could have developed the characters a little more, but I thought it was GRRReat !!!!! People have to realize this fantasy not real life. If they want to be critic go work for newspaper. I hope you follow this with more chapters.

An amalgamation of disjointed pieces.

Difficult to follow.

Not the normal cohesive story telling this writer puts out.

Need a better conclusion to the story. A little confusing at first not bad though.

Interesting plot but it got a little crazy there and ended unfinished to me at least.

Good story but somehow it seems to be in the wrong place. As others have requested would like to see the rest of the story

Definitely not up to par for your stories

People are able to read beyond that first scene in the hospital? Like really?

Great plot idea. Execution was a little wobbly. I got the gist of it up till the shower, but I’m not sure I understand the ending. Why would he leave her there and take off early? I guess I missed something.