by billwells1
Please do continue! Just tone it down a bit. The winning ingredient for incest stories is love, not rape. He can be persistent and she can be reluctant. But hard core rape is a turn off in this forum, usually.
I love man of the house stories. My suggestion for chapter 2 would be for mom to start dressing more risqué and daughter notice and get horny. You have tons of fodder from there. Good luck!
Great start! The mother shouldn't be so resigned and willing yet though.
That's no way to treat your MOTHER. You Asshole, maybe your sister, but not MOM...............................
Interesting way to start. I'd like to see where you take it.
He rapes his mom and she winds up loving it? if you think this is erotic you need mental assistance right away. The whole thing is a mess, structurally, motivationally, and, worst of all, not erotic at all. You have a right to your subject matter but it is up to you to make the reader suspend his disbelief. You didn't do that.
This type story should have been placed in the Non Consent/Reluctance section with incest, or Mother/Son tagged to it. I know sometimes it's difficult to decide where a story should be posted. However, any time a story has forcible sex involved, the only way you are going to get a lot of positive responses is to post it there. Most readers who are into Mother Son sex want to seduce the mother, not rape her. Those who are into Non Consent sex will enjoy the story no matter who he is taking.
before you take a rifle and start shooting everyone in sight
Nothing wrong with the story, please take it easy with your comments guys.
The story is good billwells1, its just that it should have been longer with a lot more back ground and more time for the son to take control of his family.
It is true that many of us have been asking the powers that be on the Lit to create an option for adding a sub genre, but they are too arrogant to listen to the readers.
For example, in this case this story would have been IncestTaboo-Reluctance and then the ones who left their comments would not have had their knickers in a twist!
Why do people now say this? "I need fucked"? Is it really so difficult to add the words "to be"? Christ this annoys me.
The writing could use a bit of work but loved it just the same. As far as people bitching about rape. Get over it for it's just a story and a true submissive needs to be put in her place. I have done it and like a good sex slave they thanked me after. That last line is completely true! FYI she was a mother and the first punishment was taking a double ended dildo in both holes at the same time while I painfully shoved it in. Did she scream? Yes! Did her son and sister law heard her? Yes. Did she suck my cock many times after on demand? Fuck yeah. That is how the true submissive like it. Don't knock it till you have been with one for it is a lot of fun.
I find it hard to believe that she would become a willing submissive while being raped by her son. She goes from being scared to lapping up his cum, hard to believe.
She was a "stay at home" mom to kids 12 and 9 years old, who are in school all day? No one taught her how to drive and she couldn't figure out how to get lessons and learn? Is she mentally defective? She's young and healthy, sits at home and lets her 22 year old son support her? This story feels like it's set in the '50s.
Besides that, there's a ton of errors of all kinds here. Get an editor.
Too much time spent focusing on her imperfections. One sentence would have covered it. Readers are smart enough to figure it out. As Wm. Shakespeare said, "Brevity is the soul of wit".
The start of your storyline was good up until the rape scene. Surely he could’ve got his mum by other means if he thought it through. ⭐️⭐️⭐️