All Comments on 'Mary's Guardian Angel Ch. 01'

There are solid ideas here but the story reads terribly. I had trouble following it all along. Please read through your work before submitting.

It does feel a little disjointed. But I'd like to think as you get feedback and keep writing you'll get better.

But I'm enjoying the premise and the characters. I look forward to more.

It is really slow.

Good story. Could use some editing. I liked that it was good clean romance with a hint of naughty

Where's the rest of the 'story'?