All Comments on 'Michael Kidnaps Mrs. Clarke'

The story was good, but the improper tense in sentence structure was distracting. Stay with either the third or first person. IE the use of my and his.

Just a little short, he didn't get to fuck her mouth or her ass yet. He needs to break her in and open all of her holes. Thanks for the post....Rich

The authors or the commentors.

Hopefully the story proves that he isn't--I would hate to think that being a fucking no good piece of shit rapist is normal

Probably a very good story if one has the patience to stay with it. Even though one cannot decide whether to use first person or generalize. I think that you should get a good book on the English language and an edior who cares. Maybe next time...

The author is an idiot and it shows in his writing. Totally brain dead to construct a sentence such as this:

"No...n...no...please. S...stop..." she begs.

More ... than any real words and there are far too many and numerous such in the story.

This story is so difficult to follow because of the changes in subject i.e I and he in the same sentence. Even the sentence construction is poor and while the basic idea is fine, the plot is too simplistic

WELL I FOR ONE LIKE THE STORY. VERY EROTIC A FULL OF SEXUAL THINGS. DO WRITE ANOTHER PART.

Stop switching tenses.

I want to read how Mr Clark ties you to a tree then impales your ass on a metal rod two inches across, that forces you stand on tiptoe to avoid rupturing your gut, then dying slowly, all alone and in agony.

And this time make sure you stay in the correct tense as you describe the terrible pain as you draw your last breath, thankful that no taxpayers money is going to be wasted on your trial.

Do you think you could manage that?

Remember to put it in non-consent/reluctance; there is a real need for more stories like that in this category.