All Comments on 'Michele's Mistake Pt. 01'

You need a bleeding proofreader.

Alternatively, you need a bloody editor.

Way too many grammar and spelling errors. You need lots of help.

Whilst the story may not be over, the story is not going to go anywhere until you can keep the reader on the story and not trying to figure out what you mean!!

Otherwise, stop here and now.

Ignore the other anonymous comment left here. Your writing was extremely enjoyable to read. They must have extremely unrealistic standards for erotica if they expect it to be grammatically perfect. If you feel like you need to work on your grammar, work on it, but that comment was callous, and a bit tantamount to bullying. It was a great read.

Thank you Anonymous #2....lol Yes, he has been harassing me since the beginning. I just laugh at him because he "hates" my stories, yet has read everyone of them. I do admit that I need a better proof reader and I do intend to improve that. Thank you again for your comments.