by My Erotic Tail
You did a very great job with the opening chapter. Now I'm waiting to see how this chain develops. :)
a few hanging sentence fragments and one misplaced apostrophe, but overall pretty good. You might want to change dieing to dying, both are words, but with very different meanings.
I like the view of the world through the reversed image of the mirror, it will be fun playing with that... good stuff.
jim : )
Once again your choice of matter for a erotic story line its just wonderful.
Keep us happy by giving us more.....
Very enthralling, this is a good story line and a great story I can hardly wait to see what's next.