All Comments on 'Missy: Valentine Dance'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Getting close

Hope it doesn't stop there. She would make a great wife

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
sweet

Sweet and horny sory.The waiting for the big moment is an excellent find! More please.

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Missy Valentine Dance

it was a very good story

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
great

super job lead up to a great finish with the right amount of tease

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
GOOD!!

Good job, left an opening for more and maybe a little more desprition on the stories....other than that very well-written

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
very good!

a very good beginning, deifnitely deserving of a follow-up

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
really now!

C'mon,she grabbed her 10 inch dildo and went in to the shower and fucked herself, but the next night her hymen was intact, think about it. Maybe you should proof read or have someone do it for you.

TheKiiierTheKiiierover 18 years ago
You misread and missed the subtle difference

It said she thrust the dildo in to her hymen ie up to, if it read into then you can take that too mean through there by taking her own virginity (though that's not really possible in the normal logical sense), that little space drasticly changes the meaning of that sentence but I agree that it should been rephrased for the sake clarity.

Please continue this story, it's simple, sweet and fun but rife with raw sexual verve/energy rarely found in most erotic reading, bravo!

Happy TrailsHappy Trailsover 18 years ago
Google Hymen and

you will find out exactly where it is located which is not inside of the vagina or the birth canal at all but at the vaginal opening. So thrusting a 10 inch dildo anywhere in the birth canal will tear the hymen.

caprinecaprineover 18 years agoAuthor
Kiiier has it...

there most definitely IS a space (as intended) between the "in" and the "to" i.e. in as far as. As for the vote, I can not leave it blank and obviously, I am not going to vote myself less than loved it. Regards, caprine.

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Hot

A good story and hot, I'm not going to tear it apart like some people do. Its amazing how people can tear stories apart but yet they do not try to write one themselves. Thanks and keep on writing, maybe a follow up on this one.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 18 years ago
uhhh

dis sory o parents *drools* how you no dat?

shawnd179shawnd179over 17 years ago
Very Hott!!

Please continue this story. Don't worry about the couple of complaints.

Thanks,

shawn_dixon@yahoo.com

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago

i like the story it reads well nice flow not too predictable but very good ... i hope you have some more chapters for these two??

cardinal19730cardinal19730almost 13 years ago
Very good writing

It's a very good story. Would love to see sequels.

BfreetorunBfreetorunover 11 years ago
I enjoy the story quite a bit...

I did wish that after the fairly long buildup that you would have stretched the love-making out a bit longer. That's just me. Thank you for writing.

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Once again the "Hymen" debate

People, if you're going to write about hymens, (and remember, 99% of girls have lost theirs by age 2-3 through walking, running, any kind of exertion) then at least do some basic research on human physiology; the hymen (when it exists) is across the vaginal opening, not up inside the vaginal canal; any girl who has an obstruction up inside the vaginal canal has much bigger medical problems than losing her virginity; I'm a retired doctor, I know this for a fact, so either get it right, or leave it out, becuase it just makes you look lazy/stupid/both of the above

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
More !

I don't care what others say purty please write more !

BfreetorunBfreetorunalmost 9 years ago
An excellent story. Please write some more for our enjoyment.

Brother/sister is my second favorite incest story after mother/son. A mix of the preceding is also very good.

OlebillOlebillalmost 8 years ago
Nice

I'm glad she waited for him and that he realised that something missing in his life HER.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 5 years ago
Warning

Just fyi guys don't read the second part. It continues after this story and the author turns her into a gang bang whore. Getting ready for big date with her true love she fucks a woman while shopping then sucks a tatoo guy then gets gang banged by 50 guys and 30 women and her man is all cool with it. Fucking disgusting. No woman is going to save her virginity for someone till 23 years old then start fucking everybody in site. What a fucking idiot.

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