by dainii
Hope you get the next chapter up sooner then later, but guess I'll be waiting. How many more chapters?
Well written. This one didn't move the plot along too much - looking forward to seeing what happens next.
Incest, abuse, mutilation, BD with or without SM, underage sex, rape, public humiliation, torture, non-consensual, mind control, and so much more that chapters of this story have had scenes cut from them to be on this site...but those issue, I have no right to judge.
What I do wonder is despite all of that, when its posted in the Romance section it earns a 4 star plus rating? Sure maybe in NON-CON, INCEST, BDSM or even Erotic Novels... But Romance. I think I'm missing something. Even as a stand alone chapter...Romance? 4 stars????
I appreciate the offering for what it was worth, I just think it's in the wrong place.
Well, its good to see your back. I wasn't sure you would return. The sex scenes in this chapter were just right. Not too much to be boring but enough to keep it interesting. However, Erin is a distraction to the plot. What is DD going to do with MGabe and his wife, Jen? Will David finally extract his revenge against MGabe? Will he forgive his wife's treachery and slavish obsession with MGabe. Will Jen want to return to David and her family or is she destined to be MG's permanent slut & whore? Can Jen successfully transition out of her situation? Does she want to? These people are living in a very twisted and depraved life style/drama. Unhealthy situations like this story usually don't have happy endings....can't wait to see how it ends. 5x5
I'll just have to wait, because I want it to be as good as the previous chapters. I can't even imagine the final outcome between David and Jennifer, with knowledge of how the story started.
Don't do like "goodhusband" and start a story "Awakenings" which I followed expectantly, but after about 25 chapters, he dropped it, and never finished it, as far as I know.
5 *'s
Jen gets off on humiliating Dave in public. She did it long ago with Paul in the lake scene, then twice with the Rat, and of course for two years with Gabe. Dave doesn't seem to realize that it turns her on, but if he did, he would also know for certain that she doesn't actually love him.
Jen mainly seems to resent Dave, probably because he doesn't dominate her like she wants. She only stayed with him out of habit, and was always open to finding a master. So she acts out her resentment by humiliating Dave.
Dave doesn't really love her either. If he did he would have taken her back by force and protected her long ago. He protects the women he truly loves (Erin and Sara) but not Jen.
Are you going to finish this? Hopefully sooner rather than later.
Really, It's been 4 months since this chapter. Your last comment was a "number" of months. Surprised is all. Not that I liked the theme, but chapter 6 gave me hope for redemption of Dave. And a complete fucking of Jen, Gabe, MP and the rest of the law firm.
Wish you would finish this sooner rather than later. Never vote until stories are completed. As it stands would vote 1.
I am finding the story line interesting, intriguing and sexual stimulating. One aspect that I would enjoy seeing you explore is to write the scenes of Jen in her sexual situations after Dave leaves her to Mr Gabe's desires. These scenes could be either Jen's or Mr Gabe's telling of the adventures away from Dave. An example I am referring to is the party where Dave refuses to allow Mr Gabe to have Sara and after Dave leaves the party while Jen stays she is obviously sexual used by Mr Gabe. Another is the Christmas party at Dave's office where he give his notice and leaves the party while Jen stays and is sexual used by Mr Gabe and associates. Also adding story lines of the sexual adventures Mr Gabe puts Jen through when they are together or with others away from Dave. I think adding these aspects to the story line would add a new dimension to the stories.
Please find the time to finish this tale...
The complete story is now available on Amazon Kindle. Just for you information. Don't know if it will released here in a couple of month, too?
I have read the "Amazon- version", couple of changes again. Still a very good story, but in my opnion with a very sad not to say depressing ending.
Hope the author, if he ever decide to post the "missing" chapters, thinks about changing the last 10-20% of his tale
I also got the Kindle version of the continuing story of Mister Gabe (aka Black bastard)
Throughout the story it was how he was going to get back at the Black Bastard, well
it was a very disappointing on how little anything is mentioned about getting back at him. Oh a few things are mentioned credit card issues and his lease on his airplanes
cancelled that was it nothing else. We eventually find out when Jen called one of the kids that Gabe didn't make parole again. That's nice what happen about telling us what he was finally busted for and for how long. A rushed and lousy ending sorry I paid for it.
FYI there is a re-write of this story on Amazon for Kindle. There are quite a few changes from this version but basically the same story and it does have a conclusion to the saga. I bought it and read it.
It has been more than 4 years since the last chapter posted, when will be the next chapter coming? Aren't we patient enough?