All Comments on 'Mommy Needs My Help Ch. 02'

Keep going please

keep going. Mom and son are about to explode.

Part 1 was a waste; the way stopped part 1 should have been submitted with part 2 as one post.

With that said your writing lacks something however while I thought on page 2 of part 2 was going to end the story you did leave a proper cliffhanger so you are starting to get what a buildup is.

The problem with part 1 is you didn't leave the reader wanting more. It could be best described as an unexciting if not boring appetizer. Such submissions and this even goes for the best of stories, about 5 or more minutes later you story is forgotten but if you left part 1 with part 2 as a single submission your scores would be hire. So for this part I give you ***

Would really like to see where this goes!

Is the dad cheating?

hell of a build up

I doubt he can drive a car

stop my heart and I need to call for an EMT assist..then just casually go to chapter 3..great work. Thanks and Happy New Year

Loved the sex. Too bad about the interruption.

author needs to pick a POV to write from, and stick with it. or, learn how to write in the 3rd person.

It's getting better 4 stars!!!!!!!!!!

Absolute piece of crap! 90% of the content is just description about the mechanics of sex acts rather than trying to develop a sensual story. Fucking idiot!