by BlewWater69
Excellent
Slow and descriptive is the way to go. A great first "Chapter" to this story. Please continue I cannot wait for the next part.
I'm a gurl and i'm not really into cock stories but its somethin about the way u write that makes them so damn good.
I can't wait for more of ur stuff. :-D
The sex was ok, but the language was so bad that I had to stop reading! Teenagers do not talk like that! I was disgusted!