All Comments on 'Mother and Son: Mary and Jeff'

I made it half way and wanted to bitch slap her. It takes more than great looks for a woman to be appealing.

All mothers and sons should experience such uninhibited love

Why not share their love.

Dad is older and this helps both.

Beautiful place to spend more time together.

Can't wait for the next chapter.

A wonderful way to start a very welcome story line. Great writing too.

Very believable situation, can't wait for what's next.

Yes ...excellent story.....please continue...yes Mary you must do it again.....

Jeff needs to fuck a baby or 2 into his mom!

GREAT

I loved fucking my mom when I was a teen!

...is what I call the intimacy I enjoy with my son. It started three years after my husband died and Tim was 24 and newly divorced. It has continued for 11 years, and his present wife has no idea about us. We meet a few times each month. I don't know how this will end in the long-term, but I don't want it to end, ever.

Let me be clear..... Ur NOT a bad or writer (above average skill actually). The story flowed rather well from begging to end, utilizing good sentence structure, proper punctuation and correct spelling. What WAS bad and needs work is creating a more developed story arc for MAIN characters (mother and son in this case). In addition to that is the need for a longer narrative in general (2.5 - 3 pgs to me is ideal). Lastly is the need (for most ppl anyway) a 'somewhat to moderate' suspension of disbelief when it comes to fiction. Or in other words a story that is to some degree believable, which this story wasn't; although only due to lack of a stronger work-up to the end result between the characters. Next time try to outline the story beforehand keeping in mind to always ask urself "if this were really happening in front of my eyes, wuld it be believeable? do thusly and ur next attempt will certainly be better!!

I to had a sexual relationship with my mom she taught me how to please a womanly

Well written story. Mom acknowledges her desire and goes for it. Son does, too. Probably happens all the time. Good job!