All Comments on 'Moving Day'

I think Tina and Mandy need to lose the birth control and get as much of their brother's baby juice inside them as they can.

"Amy entered the bathroom." Then Amy morphed into Tina, and Amy went to get the pizza and beer. Need to keep your characters straight.

Very engaging characters. Want more please

Definitely needs a part 2. Like you said, there are 2 more that still need to be filled.

please continue with story line. interesting start.

You can't keep the characters straight, so don't expect the reader to. Amy entered the bath, but it switches to Tina?

The story was well written and apart from the little glitch of the name change does it really matter. Keep on writing your stories are good.

so long as it doesn't get too convoluted with too many ladies at once. I can see the one-on-one with others watching though. 5

I am amazed about the number of times that I see folks on here blasting authors for grammar and other stuff. The is a sight for erotic writing, if what you want is correct grammar and spelling, go find an English comp site and enjoy yourself. Yes that are editors on here but they are not paid professional either. The comment section isn't a place for you to grade an english comp. assignment. What did you think of the content of the story? Also how many stories have you posted here? Most of y'all are commenting as Anon,s so my guess is none. Show us what you got!

To m_storyman_x, an escellent story and fun read, Thanks. 5*!

It is a wonderful story and I wonder if the siblings would end up together after all, the sister is now single and the brother as you mentioned before was not satisfy in bed in his marriage life and what next for them to do I hope it comes out on your next chapter of this moving day story.

Hope to see it continued. Don't worry about the no name lit professors.

Repost with Amy changed to Tina in the bath to shut up the anonymous critics. Maybe fix a few typos at the same time. Overall, no big deal. Good start to the story, interesting characters (even if Amy is a bit overbearing...). Interested in the next piece. Cheers.

How many of us wish we were in the same position

this story is very well written! and its a cool story. 5* from me.

Great story well told.

Enjoyed and hope there's more cumming

I noticed a few errors (such as the Amy/Tina mixup in the bathroom) but overall this story is really good. I came 3 times during the duration of the story. Makes me wish there was a big, hard cock in my tight, warm, soaking wet little (legal) teenage pussy. Definitely makes me think about how much I love being filled up with cum!!

Excellent story, the only thing that is left wanting is some interaction with Amy and a little more visual description of the characters in my opinion, regardless, 5* from me.

enough said, hope wifey finds out...

What a fantastic life, one doesnt one does . Very good story,keep going

I have wished when I was young that I had a sister...mother was a close second. Great story....

First it was Jamie that went into the bathroom when he showered, but afterwards it was suddenly Tina

Yeah, some occasional name confusion, still a great story, wish it was a bit longer!!

Probably not a very good chance of this ever happening (Women can be very possessive at times), but it lets my imagination run wild. What a love nest!

what happens when the sister comes to visit

I loved this story, despite the obvious errors, but I have jerked off several times while reading it over and over!

Please, please, please write a follow up to this sexy story, including Amy and Jamie a bit more too...keep it going 😋😋

Sorry ... this one was very boring !

Totally confused Tina and Amy in the toilet scene!!

Love the brother-sister sex and want more of the two of them.

Brother and Tina are good too!!

Well, I got through the first page. Those may be the actions of people in their 20s ,but totally non believable. Please try to keep the story somewhat believable.

Dialogue def needs work.

Sisters who share fathers and brothers with friends are a big NO!!

Well, I liked it and wanted to give it 5+. I think I'll go and check out a few more of yours. Thanks for sharing.

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11/10!!!!!